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Freedom is definitely something that everyone should have,but when talking about the freedom on creative artists to express their ideas in the way they like,people carry different points of view.Some people think the government restrictions are needed,while the others do not.In my opinion,I stand on the side of the latter because of the following reasons.

The main reason is that the government restrictions could decrease the quantity and quality of some creative products, such as movies,musics and books.Why people think these works are so important is that those are not only the products of our culture but also the indicators of our civilization.And some of them might become an useful reference to our children on revealing what happened in our Age.

It might also be noticed that those creative works could relieve stress from our tense lifes.In a well-developed city like Hong Kong, people get a lot of pressure from work.By listening to musics,watching films or reading books,we could divert our attention from the tension-generating problems of our career to something else.

However,we also cannot deny that there are some artists producing something violent or pornographic in the wrong place.For example,a Chinese male artist claimed that his action of having sex with a woman in public place was the art of action.Nobody is able to judge whether he is right or not,but the thing he did brings negative influence to children and adolescent for sure.Nevertheless,I believe that it is only a handful and we are able to distinguish between good and bad.

All in all,I should say that the creative artists should not be restricted by the government since their works play a significant role in our civilization and are the cure of our stressful life.