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2010-10-15 2:27 am
Dear Editor,

I am writing to express my personal opinion of “marriage is no longer a trustworthy relationship nowadays, so we shouldn’t waste time on dating with the opposite sex. Instead we should focus on our work as it is so difficult to earn a living." in SCMP post by Peter Leung dated 1 October 2010.

Married to be, or not to be is the question? Marriage has become less and less important to people today. Is it because we have lost hope in finding the ideal mate? Maybe it's that people lack faith in the idea of two souls mingling for a life time? Whatever it may be people are not getting married anymore, and the ones who are get married for all the wrong reasons.

Everyone has the right of getting married, but not everyone can be married. Marriage is not something you can try on for a day, and decide that it's doesn't fit. Marriage is that outfit that's been hanging in the back of your closet waiting for you to lose weight so that you can fit in it. In other words it is a life changing experience.

Life changing is because you are entering into a world that is unknown to most. This where you grown up fast, learn about yourself, and rekindle your spirit. The day of our wedding should be a beginning of a new life for us. We should be looking for a life partner, not just a husband/wife. On the surface marriage may just be a business contract for some people with little joy in between.

Many believe that the wedding night is the beginning to end of marriage. Meaning there is nothing else to it but to do it after that. However, being married requires you to be conscious of those around you every day. It is always going to be a work in progress. No one relationship is perfect, but every relationship can be happy.

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2010-10-18 10:20 pm
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Dear Editor,

I am writing to express my personal (it is unlikely that you are offering another person’s opinion when you write to the editor) opinion of “marriage is no longer a trustworthy relationship nowadays, so we shouldn’t waste time on dating with the opposite sex. Instead we should focus on our work as it is so difficult to earn a living. (you should quote the name of the article here)" in SCMP post (obviously, you are writing to the editor of SCMP) by Peter Leung dated on 1 October 2010.

(If you are not addressing the entire article but just the quoted sentence, I would suggest: In the article “(title of the article)” by Peter Leung (1 October 2010, section X, page Y), he wrote that “marriage ....” I am writing to express my opinion on his position.)

Married to be, or not to be is the question?. (The question of what?) Marriage has become less and less important to people today nowadays. Is it because we (Who are we? You and the editor?) have lost hope in finding the ideal mate? Maybe it's that Or, do people lack faith in the idea of two souls mingling for a life time? Whatever it (What is it? The reason of people not getting married? The reason that marriage is less important?) may be, people are not getting married anymore (This does not go well with the next phrase because you have already determined that no one is getting married anymore.), and the ones who are get married for all the wrong reasons (Are you certain that everyone who got married got married for the wrong reasons?).

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2010-10-15 10:49 am
It's well written!!!!!


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