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A Little Accident

Yesterday, our class visited an elderly home in the morning. The elderly there were kind and friendly. We gave gifts to the elderly and had talks with them. They shared their life experience with us and I really enjoyed the sharing. After that, we helped the elderly to tidy up their bedrooms. Unfortunately, Ben was so careless to drop and break a glass vase. He felt sorry about that and apologized to the elderly sincerely. The elderly were very nice and forgave Ben. We went back to school near afternoon.

2010-04-10 21:14:03 補充：
Sorry, there are some missing words. The second sentence should be amended to:

We gave gifts to the elderly. They felt very happy and talked with us.

A Little Accident

Yesterday,Our class visited an elderly home.The eldery were kind. We gave them presents . They were happy.Then,we talked to the eldery. They were friendly,and shared their life with us .

I am interested in the sharing. We thenhelped them to tidy their bedrooms. Ben was careles and dropped a glass vase. He was 〝sorry and said sorry to the eldery. The eldery were nice and forgave Ben.

We went back to school in the afternoon.( or about xxxx o'clock).

A Little Accident
Yesterday, my class visited a home of elderly. They were kind. We gave them some presents and they felt happily. And then, we chatted with them together. They were friendly and shared their lives, those I was interested in, with us.
After the chats, we helped them tidied up their bedroom. However, owing to his carelessness, Ben dropped and broke a glass vase. He was sorry for that and his regrets were expressed to them. They were nice and forgave him.
Finally, at time near afternoon, we went back to school.

A Little Accident
Yesterday, my class visited an elderly home. The elderly were kind. We gave presents to them and they were happy. Then, we chatted together. They were friendly. Meanwhile, they share their life. I was interested in it.
After that, we helped the elderly tidied their bedroom. Ben was careless, he dropped the glass vase. He was sorry about it. He apologized to the elderly. The elder were nice, they forgave Ben.
We went back school near afternoon.