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Hi,

To persuade my audience that making a donation of only 100 dollars per person would be enough. That could help the needy who live in those rural areas in China to fulfill their dreams and to have a better education for their future.
1) You should talk about those poor people in those rural areas in China.
2) To fulfill one's dream(s) <-------
3) Making a donation of ......<---This part has become the subject in the clause.
4) It is because the last sentence is too long, I had to break it into two parts.
5) We say "to have a better education" in English.
6) To do something for someone's future.<------------------


Hope that helps.
Bye Bye

2008-11-21 00:47:46 補充：
Not really, Garlic. :)

This fellow wrote" only 100 dollars per person’s donation".

I just went ahead and changed a bit for him.

2008-11-21 00:50:55 補充：
and showed him this.

3) Making a donation of ......<---This part has become the subject in the clause.<----------

I did not mean "a donation of $100 "could not be the subject of that clause.

I want to persuade my audience that a donation of 100 dollars per person is enough to help people in rural China to pursue a better education.

OR

To persuade my audience that a donation of 100 dollars per person is enough to help people in rural China to pursue a better education, I (talk about the actions you have taken to convince ur audience)

To persuade my audience that only 1000000 dollars(what dollar ?!) per person's donation
is enough to help some rural populations in China to complete their dream?
Of better education in their life.

你的句子沒有動詞，故不是完整句子。成為一句完整句子，應加上動詞如下：

I want to ...
I would like to ...
My purpose is to ...
My speech is to ...
etc.
that 以後的是一個副分句 (subordinate clause)，上面所列等是句子的主句 (main clause)。

To persuade my audience that a donation of just $100 per person is enough to help some rural populations in China fulfill their dreams of having a better education in life.

Note:
1.
Help somebody to do something
Help somebody do something
Both forms are correct.

2. a better education



2008-11-21 00:41:24 補充：
To 004,
Is there any real difference in
Making a donation of $100
and
A donation of $100
as the subject of a clause?

To persuade my audience that (,) (just) 100 dollars per person (for donation) is enough to help some rural populations in China (and) complete their dream of (having a) better education in their life.

I don't think that your grammar is wrong but your content is a bit strange.
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To convince' my audience that 100 dollars donation per person is enough to help some of the rural populations in China to realize their dreams of having better education.

All the gammer are correct!