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Dear Mr. P,

It was my pleasure to know you. In fact we have already met on June 16, Saturday in the afternoon at your shop in X Market. Me and my girlfriend Ms.S have selected 4 items from your shop.
Actually in that afternoon we have discussed with you about buying 100 to 200 pieces of your items for sending back to Hong Kong . Will this refresh your memory ?
However due to my poor English I could only discussed with you for just a few points in simple English. In fact I had a lot of question that I wanted to learn from you. When I saw your products I was actually thrilled and excited. If I have acted improperly please excuse me.
During my trip to India one of my major goals is to source products similar to the products you are making. Before we went to India I got a hand painted handicraft from my friend which was very similar to those you are making. Therefore on 16th morning we were strolling around X Market to search for the items. We found nothing we desired until we came across your shop. Once I had a glance of your products I knew I have found the ideal products that we have been looking for.
Yesterday when we returned to Hong Kong we searched through Yahoo and found that our friends in Taiwan have been granted exclusivity of your products at the end of last year, and we knew more information of you, Mr. P and Ms. K, and your products xxx. We feel happy for you that your products are so well received and appreciated by many people. We are also glad that we have a good taste on our interest of your products and we sincerely hope that we can have the chance to work with you !
In this respect I have some questions which you may help me :
1. How many category of products in your line ? (From the following web site we already found that you have m ug, Bowl, Bruch-Holder, Soap Tray and ashtray)
(Web site
2. What is the normal leadtime of your production ?
3. Can you send us quotation of your products ?



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4. Please introduce some inexpensive transportation company to us. We would like to know how much and how long will it take for courier to transport your products to Hong Kong.

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5. Since I cannot always fly to Thailand to meet with you, I hope we can select the styles and specify the quantity for you to send the goods directly to us.

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6. As for payment we will pay in advance by T/T before you send out the goods. Please advise what is your bank account or let us know what is your idea on payment method.

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7. We would like to know if there has been any party from Hong Kong or China discussing with you on the exclusivity in selling your products in these areas.
I look forward to hearing from you soon !

Kind regards,
我自已

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Hi Mr.P,
Extremely happily knows you! Actually we once met, in 1,4/6 week 6
afternoon to X Market- in your shop, I and girlfriend Ms. S has
altogether chosen 4 section your works in the shop, at that time also
had discussed with you purchased 100-200pcs to transport to Hong Kong
the matters concerned, did not know you did have the impression? But
obstructs to mine English very is really bad, at that time also only
could use the very simple English with you to say several, also had
very many questions to want at that time to consult you, actually
experienced to yours work I the innermost feelings rouses very much!
At that time if had the place which any offended please not to have to
be offended! My travel of this India must do the project is seeks the
product which is similar with your work (comparatively early in friend
hand to obtain similar handpainted craft product), early morning
continuously looks in X Market... Almost good entire market has not
all harvested, to very late unexpectedly runs into y
1.) How many funds different category does the A work Chinese
Communist Party have the product? (Known has mug in below this net,
Bowl, Bruch-Holder, Soap Trag, ashtray) (website I does not list 2. in
this)) How long your product does @ want to be able to make? 3.) 虴 A
provides the product the quotation to give us; 4.) 苳 the cloud
patterns 苳 @ cheap transport companies give us, how long want and
the transport expense does the express delivery to Hong Kong is how
calculates? 5.) ] I cannot often fly Thailand to look for you, after I
hoped can 夠 choose the design and the quantity directly delivers
goods by you for me, sends in front of the goods I to be able first
T/T payment for you (please to explain which between you can use to
receive money bank), or what do you have to the request for payment to
suggest? 6.) Before asked whether already had Hong Kong the friend had
discussed with you sold your work in Chinese or the Hong Kong agent?
Anticipated your reply, thanks!