（3）可否幫幫我改一改d文法呀！！謝謝～

Regarding organization, I have divided my presentation into three parts. Therefore, it was easy to hear and understand what I mentioned.

For verbal and physical presence: In this part, I think my voice was enough. Everybody in the room could hear me clearly. My shortcoming was that I did not have ample body language, for example: eye-contact, pointing to my visuals and moving around to keep people interested. I will make further improvement in this area.

不要每段都用conjuction，最好是把這個報告分title及content，把Organization，Verbal and physical presence做成title，bold + highlight，之後的當作是content就可以不用conjunction啦
Although是一句前負後正的句法，但你這句只提到負面的意思，不應該用although哦

Besides, I would like to change my statement into three parts. Therefore, can easily understand what I said. Furthermore : verbal and physical presence in this area. I think my loud enough. I can let everyone in the room can hear me clearly. Although I did not have enough body language. For example : eye contact, I move images, and keep people interested.

On the organization of my presentation, I had divided it into three parts so that it is easy for the audience to follow and understand what I said.

On the verbal and physical presence of my presentation, I believe my voice was loud enough to let everyone in the room hear clearly. Although I did not have exaggerating (誇張) body language, I was able to maintain (保持) eye contact with the audience. By pointing to the visuals and moving around the room, I was able to keep people interested.