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I think it will flow better if you write it like this:

Nowadays, the main entertainment for people in Hong Kong is enjoying movies at cinemas. Two of the more important cinemas are UA Cinema and Broadway circuit. Targeted to the tastes of Hong Kong people, these two cinemas focused on their markets respectively and provided with their customers different characters in movie experiences.

UA cinema has been developing different kinds of state-of-the-art facilities in order to provide with their customers the highest quality of entertainment. Such facilities include the DIRECTOR'S CLUB and the DRIVE-IN. The new faclilities has been reported as successful because they are designed to best taylor their customer's lifestyle and thus have satisfied the cinema's customers

Movie-watching in the cinema is now a main entertainment for most people in Hong Kong . Both of local cinemas , UA Cinema and Broadway Circuit with different features respectively, provide individule services for their target customers in the market .
The UA Cinema continues to equipe with more high-quality facilitie and improve its services like DIRECTOR' S CLUB and THE DRIVE-IN in order to attract more customers .

2007-01-12 20:01:27 補充：
Typing mistake : individule services ------. individual service facilitie ----- facilities

太多錯啦!

Nowadays, people *go* to cinema to enjoy the movies is the mainly entertainment in Hong Kong. UA Cinema & Broadway Circuit are the local important cinemas. They have different kind of characters and markets provided to HK people.

UA cinema continous *developing*different kind of high quality *facilities* to customers to enjoy the film, such as DIRECTOR'S CLUB & THE DRIVE-IN *that* *can* *satisfy* the customers which *attract* *them* *to* enjoy their life style.

Nowadays, people goes (going, 因一句不能有兩動詞, 後面已有is) to cinema to enjoy the movies is the mainly entertainment in Hong Kong. UA Cinema & Broadway Circuit are the local important cinemas. They have different kind of characters and markets provided to HK people respectively.

UA cinema continuous(ly, 形容詞) to develop different kind of high quality facility (function or event似乎適合d) to customers to enjoy the film, such as DIRECTOR'S CLUB & THE DRIVE-IN. Satisfies (Satisfying) the customers which attented (intended, 想enjoy life?) to enjoy their life style.

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