Could somebody please critique this poem?

Some great vocabulary in this. It's refreshing to see something beyond the usual teen angst and cliche love poems we see here. The end rhyme contributes some great humor to the piece.

boring

The first stanza is well-constructed. Nice metre and eurhythmic rhyme. After that though, it gets rather inconsistent and incredibly pretentious to the point where it would be difficult to join the reader to the poet. Having a large vocabulary is useful but complicated or pleasant sounding words are more often than not a dull choice whereas a simpler word may be much more eloquent and thought-provoking. It feels almost like an egotistical vanity project to me. I read poetry, both verse and prose, every single day for an hour or two a day and when I read a good poem, it puts me in a certain time, place, and summons a profound emotion. This one simply doesn't pass muster. Though it's worth point out that the author has a lot of potential that's untapped. However, it may take some time to unlearn the complicated verse the author uses and learn to use the correct context and regard to their reader.

Updated “In Space”
Truth is no oppressors but if so
The truth will tell me accordingly.
Even so of likeness to truth;
All things welcome of the
Will to his own to truth be it us (Jesus Come)
You guys is but one, to one out come ( as the new of slag comes; The respect!)
Whereas be it the one me outcome of all in the wind
For one love speaks
And of it; is there,the, that peace .
If not for all the peace the earth was not all in .
For One-leaving this place is a sure peace for all .
And that has all known what all He is; respect
The mystery known : And not forsaking another:
Even so the nature of God in the Son will tell you so, respect .
All has volume but the lack of faith has a lesson coming
But yet may that peace of God be the known. (“reckoned”)

For it was reckoned not credited! ( credited was a lie of Paul.( For his name was Abram ) “Before Abraham was I am.”
2 Abram said, “O Lord GOD, what will You give me, since I am childless, and the heir of my house is Eliezer of Damascus?” 3 And Abram said, “Since You have given no offspring to me, one born in my house is my heir.” 4 Then behold, the word of the LORD came to him, saying, “This man will not be your heir; but one who will come forth from your own body, he shall be your heir.” 5 And He took him outside and said, “Now look toward the heavens, and count the stars, if you are able to count them.” And He said to him, “So shall your descendants be.” 6 Then he believed in the LORD; and He reckoned it to him as righteousness
http://biblehub.com/nasb/amos/3.htm

“Just as the body without the spirit is dead, so also faith without works is dead."

http://biblehub.com/nasb/genesis/15.htm

http://biblehub.com/nasb/romans/4.htm

Well, it's bad.

Not a poem in the strict sense. But who wants to be strict these days?

I remember reading this on a poetry site.
It won an award.
Asking for critique seems pretty tongue in cheek to me.

It's stoned hippie dippie bullshit. Stupid. Maybe even gay.

May be good .

This makes me feel like i have to poop

it sounds good to me

This makes me feel like i have to poop

Yes

The " Ousia". Io credo in Dio, Padre onnipotente, creatore del cielo e della terra; e in Gesů Cristo, suo unico Figlio, nostro Signore, il quale fu concepito di Spirito Santo, nacque da Maria Vergine, patě sotto Ponzio Pilato, fu crocifisso, morě e fu sepolto; discese agli inferi; il terzo giorno risuscitň da morte; salě al cielo, siede alla destra di Dio Padre onnipotente; di lŕ verrŕ a giudicare i vivi e i morti. Credo nello Spirito Santo, la santa Chiesa Cattolica, la Comunione dei santi, la remissione dei peccati, la risurrezione della carne, la vita eterna. Amen.