請教英文高手幫我看看...?

I have good work attitude and Communication Skill communication skill (除非你指的是某種專屬溝通技巧，否則可不用大寫). I can provide excellent ( excellent是非常非常好，比你中文用的優秀等級高，在英文裡excellent比good還高兩級 - poor, acceptable, normal, good, great, excellent，有無此必要，我沒把握只提醒一下) customer services. Being a successful salesman, offering (giving 改成offering - 提供，感覺較好，另giving放在句首常用的意義好像是考慮到 – 請您自己再查一下，giving可不可以有offering相同的意義我不確定 - 也是請你自己再查一下) the best post-sales customer services and getting(get 改為getting使之與offering對稱用動名詞) revisiting(revisit 是動詞改成現在分詞當形容詞用) rate promoted are (前面的get及revisit分別改成動名詞及現在分詞當形容詞用才可使are成為句子裡的唯一動詞) my goal.
最後 – Yahoo Knowledge 大師真的不少，有幾個大師若肯
出面改的一定會比我好，助順利。

I have lots of good working behaviour especially with communicated skill and also to provide excellent customers' services.Hence, being a good salesman that'll render such follow-up services and actions to
the customers for the sake of the company to obtain the goal. Yip