Urgently check grammar

Matthew

2014-11-17 6:06 am

In my daydreams, I have always imagined what it would be like to be one of those heroes fighting these monsters. In the movies, the monsters were often super intelligent and heroes were beaten up pretty badly. If the hero won, they would usually receive a reward such as gold or his freedom.

Is above correct tense?

Thanks,
Matthew

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Godfrey

2014-11-17 3:56 pm

✔ 最佳答案

In my daydreams, I have always imagined what it would be like to be one of those heroes fighting the monsters. In the movies, the monsters were often depicted as super intelligent beings and heroes were beaten up very badly. If the heroes won, they would usually receive their rewards such as a gold medal or regain their freedom.

Comments:
these與those衝突
these monsters 改了 the monsters

pretty (spoken) = very

最後那句子.”hero” and “they” don’t agree in number
heroes, they, their

對不起, 改了原意
depicted as super intelligent beings (depict = 描述, being = 生物)

award (prize, money, trophy.. etc) 與 freedom (abstract noun) 不同類
receive their awards or regain their freedom ~ parallel in structure
gold medal ~ more specific

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