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2014-10-28 4:55 am
For workload reduction, there are some points for consideration include : increase the number of staff and reduce report writing tasks. I would suggest increasing the number of our staff members because it can provide additional support to current staff members .
麻煩看看有沒有錯 thx~

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2014-10-29 1:42 am
✔ 最佳答案
從人們的回答你可見你的原寫法有點文理不順和不清楚明確(坦白講,最後的結論/建議實在沒有point),但假如單從文法而論,只有一兩點問題:For workload reduction用錯是preposition和句子開頭這種寫法,雖然可以假設看的人已經明知你要講這主題,但是你的內容是講「解決/處理」workload reduction而不是「為了」workload reduction的選擇方案。如果你想簡潔可以用一個infinitive動詞開始。To reduce workload或者To improve work efficiency…可以有一百種講法而不用明講workload reduction.我試用一段最簡單直接的格式寫讓你看看(專重你用workload reduction這主題用詞和編排..但會結論一個較為合理的選擇理由)Points to consider to reduce workload include: increase the number of staff or reduce among of report writing. I would suggest to hire more staff because workload sharing will maintain the level of quality of work and knowledge sharing among staff members.
2014-10-28 5:36 pm
In order to deal with problem of workload, there are some points for consideration which include : (1) to encourage the staff to attend in-service training courses so as to raise their working abilities. (2) to minimize the clerical works.(3) to appoint the staff to do jobs based on their potentiality.
參考: Partly according to Dictionary
2014-10-28 5:51 am
There are two suggestions to relieve the existing heavy workload. Firstly, the number of staff members should be increased to provide additional support to the existing staff. Secondly, the reporting writing tasks should be reduced.


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