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While the whole world is focusing on every single new smartphone, IT companies such as Samsung, Apple and LG are all inventing or improving smart watches which is able to send e-mails, calculate heart rate or send instant messages. I am sure that smart watches will become more popular than smartphones after a few years.

While smartphone is the focus of the whole world, IT companies such as Samsung, Apple, and also LG are inventing smartwatches which functions include email, instant message, and heart rate counter. I believe that it will become more popular than smartphone in the coming future.

When the whole world focuses on the new mobile phones, IT companies, such as Samsung, Apple and even LG, are inventing smart watches that can send emails, count our heart rate or send instant messages to others. I believe smart watches will become more popular instead of smart phones. familiar = 熟悉/認得…未能估計你想講的是何意思…所以只能插一個普通意思指”流行”(popular)或可能更貼切的是”潮流”(fashionable)。不過技術上好似隻smart watch係是link-to 部smart phone才能運作…所以你(I believe)的結論(smart watch更xxx超越 smart phone)有點不合理，因為沒有連接smart phone的smart watch應該只係可以顯示時間?。

When the whole world focus on the new mobile phones and all IT companies such as Samsung, Apple and even LG, are inventing smart watches that can send emails, counting our heart rate or send instant messages to others.I believe that will be more convenient than smart phones.

In recent years, smart mobile phones have been highly appreciated around the world, yet famous IT companies such as Samsung, Apple and LG are switching their focuses on smart watches, with features of full mobile phone capability, sending emails and monitoring heart rate. I believe spotlights will be put on smart watches in the coming future with its overwhelming compatibility when compared to smart phones.