批改1年級英文作文 感激!!

Mark is a lazy boy. He likes to play the video game all [the] day and does not want to do anything. His mother is very angry with him

One day, Mark was playing the video game as usual. Suddenly, there is a spark[s] from the video game, Mark was sucked into the game world.

Mark was so frightened because he found himself [was] trapped inside the game world. He tried to find a way out but without success. At that time, he met an old man. The old man told him how to leave [there].

The old man said to him: "You just help to me to clean my house until I'm satisfied with your performance, you will be able to leave [here]." Mark wanted to leave there immediately, so he accepted the old man's request.

A week later, Mark was still trapped inside the game world. He hoped to leave there as soon as possible so [that] he worked hard every day.

Finally, the old men was very satisfied with his performance, Mark was happy that he could return to the real world. Since then, Mark became a diligent and helpful kid[;] that his mother loves him so much.

Since then, Mark "has become" a diligent ...

the end is his mother loves him so much
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the story is good