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2014-07-27 6:47 am
An unusual thing at school

One day, David was leaving his classroom since he had finished his make-up test. But it was very strange, he was the only person left the classroom, and that it was very quiet.

David was the last one to leave, he was thinking about how he could get high marks in his test. Suddenly, there was aloud sound coming from the classroom.

`Bang!’ David had a chill. He flashed thought of someone trying to hit him. He was very frightened. But… A few second later, he was curious to know where the sound came from. He walked close to the classroom to see what happened.

Things turned really bad because he saw his friends hitting another boy onto the ground. David held his breath and saw what happen. They used their fists hit the boy. The boy was climbing on the ground. Realized what was happening. David turned around quickly and quietly to avoid being involved.

Suddenly, David had a sneeze. Two boys heard it and turned around at once. And then, what did they see? A nosy boy who was not in their plan appeared!

The two boys were very angry and opened the door. They caught and hit David. He was trying to run but they caught him back quickly, he could only cried,’ Help!’

At that moment, the boy who was lying on the ground was trying to leave. The two boys grabbed the boy and didn’t pay attention to David. He managed to leave the classroom without their notice. Then he ran faster and faster to the staff room. At that time, the two boys all saw David was already left the classroom!

They were trying to find where the boys were. The teachers came back and punished the boys. David was not injured but another boy had to go to hospital.

They had a big punishment from the teachers; they had a black mark and 5 days of school suspension.

回答 (2)

2014-07-27 9:36 pm
✔ 最佳答案
其實最後1段不用改都行的 ,寫得不錯(個人)
參考: mum
2014-07-27 6:57 am
傳統英文老師都教我們,句子一開首不要用 But, And。

But 可改用 However, Nevertheless, Nonetheless.

2014-07-26 23:00:22 補充:
第一段我會這樣寫:

On one day, when David left his classroom after finishing his make-up test, something strange happened. He was the only person who left the classroom, and it was very quiet.


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