求修改,英文高手幫幫忙

2014-06-17 5:25 am
我是家長,是我寫給學校,幫小朋友申請新學年多學一種語言,本身只學英文,現在想學埋法文,(學校可以選擇學2種語言的),現在希望學校批準,thanks

另外我是用E-mail send,請問title點寫


Dear Mrs.XXX,

I am XXX,parent of XXX studying in class of XX. I am writing this letter to request
for learning French in the next semester. In the beginning,
I had only chosen English for my daughter but now I would like her to learn French and English as well. It is my earnest hope that you will consider and grant me the
request for enrollment in next semester. Thank you very much.

yours faithfully,
xxx

請幫忙修改,因寫給外藉老師的,希望表達得禮貌一點, thanks alot.

回答 (3)

2014-06-17 6:34 am
✔ 最佳答案
Dear Mrs.XXX,

I am XXX, [the] parent of XXX studying in [class XX]. I am writing this letter to [express my wish for my daughter to be taught French, in addition to English, in the next semester.]

[Seeing that my daughter has shown the capability and expressed her interest in learning French, I believe that it would be most beneficial for her to learn both French and English, so that she could discover her potential in arts.] It is [therefore] my earnest hope that you [would allow my daughter enroll in the French class next semester.]

Thank you [so] much [and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.]

[Yours sincerely],
xxx

2014-06-16 22:37:52 補充:
如果 XX 係人名,咁就照寫 the class of XX

Title 可以考慮:Application for French Class in Next Semester

2014-06-16 22:42:19 補充:
Application for [Enrollment in the] French Class Next Semester
2014-06-17 10:10 am
... you would allow my daughter TO enroll in the French class next semester.

Sentence pattern:
allow someone to do something

Let, make 可用 infinitive withour "to", 但 allow 不能
2014-06-17 7:07 am
Grammatical mistakes:
(1) "the" parent of
(2) "request" being a transitive verb, "request for" is wrong. As a noun, "request" can be followed by "for". (e.g. to make a request for ....)

Meaning:
"grant me the request" is wrong.

You hope the teacher will grant your request. (I earnestly hope you will ...)
You hope the teacher will grant your daughter permission to enrol in French lessons. (I earnestly hope you will ...)

If you want to emphasize "your hope, you'll write:
It is my earnest hope that you will grant my request for enrolling my daughter in the next semester.


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