緊急!改英文文法,20點

1) In [the aspect of career development], [the] department [provides] [x some] [comprehensive] training for [x the] students [on necessary career skills] such [x such] as communication [strategies] and public relations writing.

2) Also, [the] department [organises regular] [x the guest] talks [hosted] by industry professionals [x regularly].

3) [The students from the department] can [attain professional growth] and fully utilize their potential.

4) I [am willing to] learn [x more] [, so as to attain the skills] and [x accumulate] [work] experience [necessary for my future career].

5) As for the curriculum, I think the programs offered by the department are better than those of the Hong Kong Polytechnic University, no matter in terms of quantity or quality.

2014-06-12 20:45:16 補充：
你咁樣講poly好似唔係幾得體喎，另外尤其business相關嘅科目，英文幾重要，好好努力呀。

1)In respect of curricula ,this department provide various training courses for students such as; communicative skills, public relations and so on.
2)Also,this department will hold the guest talks regularly by the industrial professionals.
3)By means of learned knowledge, the students of this department can develop and apply fully their potentialities.
4) I will learn more practicle skills in order to acquire and accumulate such experience.

5)喺課程內容方面,呢個學系嘅課程比POLY 嘅更多及充實。
(5) As far as knowledge being concerned, we would like to know which course in this division has more substantial achievements as compared with that of the polytechnique course.

你 chitchat 可以講, 但 in black and white 貶低 Poly. 不大好. 容易 Invite trouble
無論如何, 翻譯如下:

As for the curriculum, the program offered by the department is far superior to that of the Hong Kong Polytechnic University in terms of quality and quantity.

~ in acknowledgement of 七瀨遙’s contribution.