題目
"Students nowadays are spending too much time online and playing video games. This is affecting their ability to communicate with others."
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Students nowadays are spending too much time online and playing video games. This is affecting their ability to communicate with others.
Now the 21st century, not everyone is missing the computer. Whether people go to work or school owners, we all need a computer. We mainly used the computer is the "Internet" and now the "Internet" Each of us has become an important part of life.
Of course, the Internet has its advantages, but also has its disadvantages. So it was that the Internet will make the students addicted, addicted to online chat, games, affect their learning, has worsened. Meanwhile, a long-time on the internet makes their health badly. So, say the Internet more harm than good, he stubbornly opposed their children online.
I do not think that access to the Internet more advantages than disadvantages. First, the very large amount of information online, we can learn a lot of online books in the classroom and not learn knowledge. Not to mention the teachers are now required to stay most of the jobs on the Internet to look for materials to complete. So the Internet is very important to students. In the online search of high quality of the information, you can get the latest information, but also very convenient and flexible, ready to start learning. Besides they can know about the latest news, widen their field of vision, and gain their knowledge. However, many people spend too much time chatting online or playing computer games. Some even forget their study and their work.
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2014-05-26 5:20 am
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2014-05-26 9:09 pm
✔ 最佳答案
Students nowadays are spending too much time online and playing video games. This is affecting their ability to communicate with [the] others.Now [in] the 21st century, [hardly anyone can live without Internet, no matter what his/her job is. The fact is so simple: we all need Internet.] [Desktop computers used to be the main platform to access Internet, but now Internet has become so pervasive that we can go online with phones and even glasses.]
[Internet is a double edged sword. While it facilitates our lives, it easily causes addiction among its users to social networking and gaming, which would severely affect their normal lives and health. As a result, there have been some anti-Internet campaigns these years as social problems related to Internet emerge.]
[However, I do not think that Internet has more disadvantages than advantages. There is a very huge amount of information online, from which we can learn a lot about things we would never come across in the classroom that would broaden our horizons. Also, every profession heavily relies on Internet for timely quality information to keep abreast of the world with flexibility and ease, which is vital under the trend of globalization today. In view of the significance of Internet to the world in the information age, it is therefore unfair to say that Internet brings more harm than good.]
2014-05-26 13:18:07 補充：
你基本 grammar ok，但係複雜少少嘅 sentence structure 同 grammar 你要再努力啲。
但我覺得你最大嘅問題係內容（希望你唔好介意），文理唔係幾順，你最尾果段嘅 stance 仲錯埋，而且 learning 個 point 你其實 repeat 咗最少兩次，實際上你 adv ：disadv 嘅數目只係 2：1，談唔上話 convincing，最少要 3：1。
2014-05-26 6:31 pm
Nowadays students have spent too much time online and playing video games. That has reduced their opportunities to communicate with others.
As in 21st century, nearly everyone needs to use computer either working or studying, In addition, we always apply it to access the Internet then that has become an important part of our lives.
Not only the Internet has its advantages, but also its disadvantages. So that the students will be addiced to the Internet,e.g. online chat and games and that will affect their teacher's assignments. In addition, they will suffer badly from health after prolonged online. So, people are saying that is more harmful than good and they stubbornly oppose their children being online.
I do not think that accesses to the Internet more advantages than disadvantages. Firstly, there are lots of information online so that we can read and learn a lot of online books in the classroom in order to gain more knowledge. Not to mention the teachers who are now required to stay most of their time on the Internet to look for materials to prepare for their lessons and same as the Internet to the students. In the online search of high quality of the information, you can get the latest information, also that is very convenient and flexible to learn. Besides, they can know about the latest news,and gain more knowledge. However, many people spend too much time chatting online or playing computer games. Some of them even forget their study and work.
As in 21st century, nearly everyone needs to use computer either working or studying, In addition, we always apply it to access the Internet then that has become an important part of our lives.
Not only the Internet has its advantages, but also its disadvantages. So that the students will be addiced to the Internet,e.g. online chat and games and that will affect their teacher's assignments. In addition, they will suffer badly from health after prolonged online. So, people are saying that is more harmful than good and they stubbornly oppose their children being online.
I do not think that accesses to the Internet more advantages than disadvantages. Firstly, there are lots of information online so that we can read and learn a lot of online books in the classroom in order to gain more knowledge. Not to mention the teachers who are now required to stay most of their time on the Internet to look for materials to prepare for their lessons and same as the Internet to the students. In the online search of high quality of the information, you can get the latest information, also that is very convenient and flexible to learn. Besides, they can know about the latest news,and gain more knowledge. However, many people spend too much time chatting online or playing computer games. Some of them even forget their study and work.
參考: Partly according to ”The Advanced Learner's Dictionary of Current English with Chinese Translation” published by Hong Kong Oxford University Press in 1975
2014-05-26 7:17 am
Students nowadays are spending too much time on playing online games and video games. This affects their ability to communicate with others.
Nowadays, not everyone can live without a computer. Whether going to work or to school, we all need a computer. It became an important part of our daily life.
Of course, the Internet has its advantages, but also has disadvantages. The Internet will make students addicted to online chat, games, which affects their studies. Meanwhile, a long time on the Internet makes their health badly. So the Internet is more harm than good.
I do not think that accessing to the Internet has more advantages than disadvantages. First, the large amount of information on the Internet lets us find a lot of online books and get information. Teachers are now required to look for materials on the Internet. So the Internet is very important to students. In the online search of high quality of the information, you can get the latest information, but it is also very convenient and flexible, ready to start learning. Besides, you can know about the latest news, widen your field of vision, and gainyour knowledge. However, many students spend too much time on chatting online or playing computer games. Some even forget their study and work.
Nowadays, not everyone can live without a computer. Whether going to work or to school, we all need a computer. It became an important part of our daily life.
Of course, the Internet has its advantages, but also has disadvantages. The Internet will make students addicted to online chat, games, which affects their studies. Meanwhile, a long time on the Internet makes their health badly. So the Internet is more harm than good.
I do not think that accessing to the Internet has more advantages than disadvantages. First, the large amount of information on the Internet lets us find a lot of online books and get information. Teachers are now required to look for materials on the Internet. So the Internet is very important to students. In the online search of high quality of the information, you can get the latest information, but it is also very convenient and flexible, ready to start learning. Besides, you can know about the latest news, widen your field of vision, and gainyour knowledge. However, many students spend too much time on chatting online or playing computer games. Some even forget their study and work.
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