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2014-05-13 8:43 pm
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Topic:To be labelled a 'Work of Art', a painting, sculpture or other art form should display certain qualities that are unique. However, over the past century there has been a decline in the quality of prize-winning artwork and it is now possible for quite ordinary pieces of art to be labelled 'masterpieces' whilst true works of art pass unnoticed.
Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

Artists create their own forms of art and others will label it as a “work of Art” if some unique qualities are shown. It is claimed that the art standard has been declined in these decades. Ridiculously, people may even regard ordinary pieces as masterpiece but true works of arts remain unnoticed. This saying is not the real case and I hold an opposite view regarding this opinion.

In society, there are people who appreciate the arts and to evaluate it deeply and analytically. Very often, there are art exhibitions held in different districts in Hong Kong. In Asia, there are world-wide art exhibitions, like the upcoming Basel Fair in June in Hong Kong. Many prize-winning artworks are on display and some prestigious arts appreciators said that they are of high quality and artists expressed high degree of creativity. Obviously, the art standard didn’t decline and there are always platforms for people to appreciate true works of arts.

Besides holding arts exhibition, auctions can be found around the globe. There are regular auction weeks, especially the European countries. Due to the historical background, people living in France, Britain and the rest of Europe are of higher arts sense. They cultivate the love for arts and try hard to improve their painting skills. Among them, it is not rare to discover fabulous artists. In addition, many award-winning artworks will be used for buyers to bid. It can be said that true work of arts actually are appreciated by arts lovers.

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2014-05-14 12:32 am
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Artists create their own form[] of art and others will label it as a “work of Art” when some unique qualities are shown. It is claimed that the art standard has been declining [或has shown decline] in recent decades. Ridiculously[這形容詞有點過火或配錯形容詞-可考慮Some even say], people may []regard ordinary pieces as masterpiece but true works of arts remain unnoticed. This saying is not the real case and I hold an opposite view regarding this opinion.

In society, there are people who appreciate [] arts and to evaluate it intensely [deeply看似中文意思-英語”深度”有很多形容不用用deeply evaluate,另有seriously認真地]and analytically. In Asia, there are world-wide art exhibitions, like the upcoming Basel Fair in June in Hong Kong. Very often, there are art exhibitions held in different districts in Hong Kong.[只是把前後兩句調動-因為作文一般先講重要/大型,再引伸細節/副題] Many prize-winning artworks are on display and some prestigious arts appreciators said that they are of high quality and artists expressed high degree of creativity. Obviously, the art standard didn’t decline and there are always platforms for people to appreciate true works of arts.

Besides holding arts exhibition, auctions can be found around the globe. There are regular auction weeks, especially the European countries. Due to the historical background, people living in France, Britain and the rest of Europe are of higher arts sense[這幾隻字看似中式英文組合-我會改為are of better sense in arts]. They cultivate the love for arts and try hard to improve their painting skills. Among them, it is not rare [這種寫法在英語界都被視為累贅和反反面詞-可改為直接意思=It is easy] to discover fabulous artists. In addition, many award-winning artworks will be available [will be used=???被利用/使用/工作] for buyers to bid. It can be said that true work of arts actually are widely appreciated by arts lovers.


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