問問英文sentences 問題

基本上沒有錯,建議變成

My name is Cindy Wong. I am twenty five years old. I have a brother, father and
mother. They are nice. I graduated from the Hong Kong Institute of Vocational Education in 2004. I have learn how to cooperate with others. I like playing badminton and eating hamburgers. I have been studying a course in English for one year.

變不變也可以。

要是你沒信心,可以上網翻譯一下。建議google翻譯。

My name is Cindy Wong. I am twenty five years old. I have a brother, father and mother. They are nice. I graduated from the Hong Kong Institute of Vocational Education in 2004. I like playing badminton. I have learn how to cooperate with others. I like eating hamburgers. I have been studying a course in English for one year.
Adjustment:
I am Cindy Wong, twenty-five of age and lived with my father, mother and eldest brother. All of us are fine. As I graduated from the Hong Kong Institute of Vocational College in 2004 and have been continuing my study of course in English for one year. In addition, my hobby is to play badminton and to eat hamburgers too. In order to participate in social activities, I used to learn how to join and making friendships with others.

New :
My name is Cindy Wong . I am twenty five years old . I have a brother, father and mother . They are nice. I graduated from the Hong Kong Institute of Vocational Education in 2004. I like playing badminton. I have learn how to cooperate with others. I like eating hamburgers. But I am very hard to have a balanced diet . I have been studying a course in English for one year.

I am twenty-five years old. (Don't forget the hyphen.)
I have LEARNT how to cooperate with others. (Use a past participle)

Just a suggestion:
I live with my parents and my brother.
I have been attending an English course for one year.

太多句子 start with "I".

I have been studying a course in English for one year. (錯)
I have been studying a English course for one year.