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Nowadays, communication has become more and more convenient as there are different social networking sites like Facebook , Instagram and Weibo, among which Facebook is the most popular [x one]. Facebook is not merely a communication tool, but also a tool for us to make different friends, express our feelings by posting photos and statuses on the wall and keep in touch with others. With such versatility, Facebook has succeeded in attracting many users [x come] around the world, especially teenagers. So can Facebook really affect our lives?

It is universally known that Facebook brings [x a] great benefits to maintaining relationship. Even if we [x are] seldom meet someone in person, we can still know how they are recently by visiting their wall and leaving them messages. This helps people [x to] keep in touch and maintain their relationship. Also, Facebook provides us a platform to know different people. Through Facebook, we can easily [x to] make friends with foreign people as its users are [x come] from different countries, [x it] enabling us to understand more [x cultural] about the culture of other places. It definitely is a good way to broaden our horizon.

However, every coin has two sides. Many people criticize this mode of communication would have adverse effect on teenagers. They said that not only would teenagers spending lots of time on Facebook experience a distraction in attention during revision, but also a deterioration of their relationship with their close friends. Take me as an example. In the past, I was so addicted to Facebook that I spent little time on my homework. As a result, my academic performance worsened. What is more, when my friends invited me to attend [x a] gatherings, I would turn them down in order to have more time playing Facebook games. [x In this case,] Our relationship was thus no longer as close as before. In fact, statistics showed that many teenagers indulged in Facebook at night [x and] got less rest which was harmful to health.

2014-02-24 01:04:13 補充：
Everything in the world has its pros and cons, including Facebook. But if we [x can] use it appropriately, it [will not be harmful but] beneficial to our lives.

Nowadays, communication has became more and more convenience as there are different social networking site like the facebook , instergram and microblog. .... With these comprehensive functions, facebook succeed in attracting many users come from all over the world, especially teenagers. So, can facebook really affect our lives?
It is universally known that facebook bring a great benefit to our international relationship. In the first place, Even if there are some people we seldom meet, we can still know their up date by visiting their wall and leave them messages. This helps us to keep in touch and maintain the relationship with them. Next, facebook provides us a platform to know different people. In facebook, we can easily make friends with foreign people as its users are [] from different countries. It enables us to understand more cultural of other places. It definitely is a good way to broaden our horizon.
However, every coin has two sides. Many people criticize this mode of communication bring some problems to teenagers. They say that teenagers spend lots of time on facebook, it not only distracts their attention from their revision(you mean study/homework), but also influence their relationship with their intimate friends. Take me as an example, in the past, I relied much on facebook, but spent fewer and fewer time on my homework. As result, my academic performance got worse. What’s more, when my friends invited me to attend a gathering, I would turn them down in order to play facebook games. In that case, our relationship was no longer as close as before. Apart from above-mentioned drawbacks of facebook, statistics also reveal the fact that many teenagers hover around the facebook into late night and have less time to rest, and it will harm their health. Everything in the world has its pros and cons, [] facebook is not an exception. But if we can use it appropriately, it can be beneficial to our lives.