各位高手請幫幫我﹗改一改Grammar

During abseiling, my feeling is entirely different from my first encounter. I understand how to use the tool, so that I can successfully complete the task; [] I will continue to try, so I can break though my own limitations. This is the first scenario where I have the ability and willing to try. [編排結構跟其他二三的格式不同，引致閱凟時不易理解原來是假設情況，看來似是個人實際經歷，應考慮重編用This first scenario is…作為開始。]
The second scenario is where I wish to try, but have no ability to accomplish it. This usually happens in the first engagement with new things, and I am willing to try. For example, as my first try of abseiling, [] it is completely new, even though I am unable to finish, [] I am willing to engage and learn.
[]The third scenario is that I am able to accomplish, but do not want to try. Although I have the ability to do it, []I do not want to break through my limits again. For example, I have completed [] abseiling once, []but I do not want to try it one more time.
The last kind of scenario is that I cannot afford to do it [cannot afford = 沒有金錢能力或者是心理上輸不起；unable = 沒有身體能力/技能 – 你一直在講心志的能力，為何這句改為afford?請自行修改], and I also do not want to try. When I learn to play the magic rings, I do not know how to play, but I also do not want to try. This is the most often situation in everyday life, because I cannot afford [同上 - unable] to deal with, so I chose to evade [或 avoid].[原文內容又I又they又he等等的主角不斷改變實在不明你在寫誰，假如你假設是別人或評論一般人便把以上的I全改造they-them等集體名詞，假如你想用個人化的主觀角色來講出三個可能情況便維持用I，而不要講到某處想法便改為別人；動詞的tense亦有時是現在式，有時又寫過去式；假如是你表達事實(你的理論)可以全用present tense，因為全是假設並沒有發生的時間規限或對比。]文法上留意：「雖然…但(不過)」的英文Although / Even though…, ….後句不用加but的-這是法規。對比兩樣事件：xxx, 但yyy的英文 xxx, but yyy. 中文「而且」在英文句中不是but而是and.CANNOT是一個字…[留意software都會提醒]
結論：原文應該是字搬字的用翻譯機器吧，有太多不會英文格式的詞語和句式。有些英文用詞亦不太正確。[原於中文的寫法的用詞本身和演繹層次有大部份跟英文(地道)表達句子編的排或用詞不會一樣的。]閱讀英文時多點留意字意在文章中的關係，而不只是認知(記住)中文解釋，因為記得的中文解釋未必幫助你將來寫英文句時用中文轉為英文(大部份這樣的轉法都會是錯的)
中文版:
我在沿繩下降中，跟當初第一次接觸完全不同。…。這便是第一種情況：有能力並且願意去嘗試。
而第二種情況是…。通常會出現在我們第一次接觸新事物時出現的情況，…。
在第三種情況是…，[並且完成了]，但我不願意再嘗試多一次以上。
最後一種[]情況是我沒有能力去做，…。

In abseiling, this time is very different from what Iexperienced initially. I know how to usethe tool, so that I can achieve my goal successfully. I willcontinue to challenge myself in order to break my personal limits. This is the first situation I encounter that Iwill be capable of and willing to keep trying.The second situation is I can achieve the goal although I amnot willing to do so. Where they usuallyappear in the first contact with new things happen, but he was willing to try. For example, my first contact with abseilingwas because I had never attempted before, thus I cannot finish the task. Yet I am willing to try to learn the trick.The third situation is I have the ability to accomplish it,but lack of the will of attempting it. Although I have the ability to do it, I do notwant to break beyond my first record afterwards. Forexample, I have completed over abseiling once with success, but will notattempt to do it again.The final scenario is I do not have the ability toaccomplish the task neither I have the will to attempt doing it. When I first came into contact with the magicrings, I didn’t know how to play and did not have the willpower to try itout. This is the situation we encounterfrequently in daily lives. It is becauseI realize that I am incapable of doing it, then I choose to avoid it.