求comparison&contrast 改功課!!!

[匿名]

2013-09-30 4:44 am

請求看看我有沒有做錯,作錯or作得不好可以再改^^
use this two subjects from the list below
Shopping styles of males and females\News coverage on TV and in newspapers

1.Write a topic sentence for each subject (1 comparison, 1 contrast)
Make sure to make meaning.
Do not simply list similarities and differences!
Avoid empty words: different, change, alike…
My:(以下我作得對嗎?我是1 comparison, 1 contrast,但還是要2個都要寫comparison, contrast)
The shopping style of males tends to focus on the merchandise; on the contrary, the shopping style of females tends to focus more on the process.
The news coverage on TV is wider compared with that in newspapers because many people have TVs and only a few people subscribe newspapers.

2.Develop one of your topic sentences into a paragraph focusing on similarities or focusing on differences
Write the paragraph: 100 words
Focus on one supporting idea
Add at least one example into your paragraph
My:
(最後,可否改 Grammar,我篇文太差= ="再幫忙舉個例子湊到一百字吧.感激!.)
Males think before they buy while females buy before they think. Males do not like lots of shopping. They usually have thought thoroughly and made comparisons of the prices before actually shopping. On the contrary, females enjoy the shopping process and spend more time choosing things they like. Women sometimes buy things because of the color or design even though they already have similar things at home.

回答 (1)

Tin Lam

2013-10-01 8:14 am

✔ 最佳答案

It should be 'The shopping style of men tend to...'
'The news coverage of TV...'
'Men think before...women buy before thinking carefully. Men are not keen on shopping. They usually think twice and compare the prices before making a purchase. On the contrary, women enjoy the process of shopping and prefer to spend time to choose their favorite items. Women never consider the practical value of the items, and buy whatever they want, even they have one with familiar design.'
Hope this can help you ^^

2013-10-01 20:04:04 補充：
As everybody knows, Hong Kong is a city, densely populated and is always hustle and bustle. Hong Kong is critically polluted, that people have to wear masks to go out and that people are always reminded to stay home. Hong Kong's capital is China, the second biggest country in the world.

2013-10-01 20:05:07 補充：
In comparison, Melbourne is a city with fewer people living there and the people there works in a slow, peaceful pace. Australia possesses numerous precious natural resource and the air there is much fresher. Melbourne's capital is Austalia, a small country in a small state next to the biggest state

2013-10-01 20:05:30 補充：
Which one do you like better, Hong Kong or Melbourne?

2013-10-01 20:06:09 補充：
Sorry that I have to post them separately because the words are over the limit ^^" Hope this can help youXP

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