急!關於客戶服務的自我介紹,有一小段英文在文法上希望能給意見

先改正你原文的文法和字詞，再另寫一段改良版: During my day to day work, I have to serve different types of customer[]. [This made me (這意思是“被逼地”有點負面)] I have learnt various [] communication skills, and I realize that better communication [] ability is a great advantage and enable me to improve [] relationship with customers.[當中的文法-例如用詞或為何用某詞的某一種詞未能詳解了-多留意英文介紹文章而不是評論文章的寫法上用詞的不同 – 你寫的方法似客觀評論文而不是自我介紹。] I have to server different types of customer in my daily work. I have learnt to apply various communication skills to improve my relationship with customers to get better business performance.[重點要簡潔而不是重覆地講同一樣主題或把一個要點拆開，反而要把重點綜合為你的介紹最終功能或作用和你達到的是甚麼 – 不是單是你的自我增值或服務態度技術，甚至不是跟客戶打好關係，那些只是手段，成效是跟行業/業務的關係(我只是給你方向，實際內容你仍要自己修改business performance的內容是甚麼。]

During my daily routine work, I have to serve various kinds of customers, that has made me learned a variety of communicative skills,then I realize that better communicative skills' ability is a great advantage to enable me to inprove the relationships among customers.


2013-09-12 10:24:49 補充：
Amendment: .....to enable me to improve the relationships.........customers.

I have to serve a lot of customers on my job. This job duty attributed to my procuring of variouscommunication skills. I realize that abetter communication skill is of great advantage to my future engagements andwill fortify my relationship with the customers.