The figure given shows that the total number of different telephone calls in Finland from 1995 to 2004.
Firstly,for the local call.There are lots of using until 1995 to 2004,It is suprisingly that from 1995 to 2001,the calls of it are the highest(The most one is about 17000 millions calls).But it started to drop in 2002.Finally,it decreased to 12000 millions calls in 2004,But the local-landing are still major telephone calls type in Finland
Beside,the national and international calls keep growing in the recently years(1995-2004).In 1995,the calls of it are just 6000 millions.But they are more and more.It had about 10500 millions calls in 2004.Interestingly,The growing rate is very small of it.Nine years later,it is the second numerous calls in all of three.
Moreover,the mobile calls rise so fast from 1995 to 2004.It only takes 200 millions calls in 1995.In 1997,the calls of it are 2000 millions.After that,it continue growing.It climb from about 3000 millions calls to 5000 millions calls.The develop rate of it is the tallest in all three types of calls.It hold on the third of them.But,the difference of Local-landing and mobile is smaller than the past.
To sum-up,the local calls are the most ,but it starts droping per years until 2002.The national and international of landing calls are the following.However,aloughth mobile calls is the lowest,the increase rate of it is more than other two types of calls.
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2013-07-11 10:54 pm
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2013-07-14 11:08 pm
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I asked a pro, she said it's around band 4-4.5 in ILETS. Not too good, you better practise more.
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2013-07-13 4:34 am
你很多句子都是不很完整。您最好可以用中文簡要解釋你要說的事情。
我為你的第一句，提供了一個英文例子：
2013-07-12 20:34:58 補充：
EXAMPLE
The following summarises the local and international telephone calls initiated in Finland for the years from 1995 to 2004...
2013-07-12 20:36:05 補充：
...Firstly, the number of local calls increased annually from 1995 to 2001, to a peak of 17 billion calls in 2001, then it started to fall each year (gradually) to reach 12 billion calls in 2004. There were far more local calls than international calls made in Finland.
我為你的第一句，提供了一個英文例子：
2013-07-12 20:34:58 補充：
EXAMPLE
The following summarises the local and international telephone calls initiated in Finland for the years from 1995 to 2004...
2013-07-12 20:36:05 補充：
...Firstly, the number of local calls increased annually from 1995 to 2001, to a peak of 17 billion calls in 2001, then it started to fall each year (gradually) to reach 12 billion calls in 2004. There were far more local calls than international calls made in Finland.
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