升中自我介紹!急!以下可以嗎?

I will help you to correct the English part... You can translate it back to Chinese....

Good afternoon or morning, I am XXX with my English name of XXX. I am XX years old (actually you don't need to talk about that...as they know your profile). I enrolled in XXX Primary School. In my leisure time, I like to swim and cycle as these activities are in accordance with good wholesome. I am an optimistic (樂觀) and talkative person ( actually I don't understand what do you stand for open Lang --- is that talkative? You may change the adj as the word) (optimistic already means happy). On the other hand, my favorite subject is Chinese as Chinese is interesting to me , I enjoy it a lot. Moreover, I am also a helpful person , I always help my friends in trouble . ( then , give more evidence on how you help others, secondary teacher love students doing services.) ( I suggest you not to say about your weakness as this will let the teacher see you weakness and beware of your language speaking)

This is what I can help you, I am a former primary six student , I hope I can help you with the interview introduction .

My Chinese name is XXX and I have an English name - XXX. I am enrolled in XXX Primary School currently. My favorite sports are swimming bicycling respectively. These sports are beneficial for my physical well-being. My personality is very outgoing, and I think this quality of mine will be able to cheer up the people around me. I am also a very helpful person which makes me welcome by many others. My favorite subject is Chinese because I think it is very interesting. My only weakness is Mathematical skills seem to be a bit poor, yet I will try my best to improve and will continue to devote my efforts in it.P.S. I changed our content a little bit as far as organization is concerned. I finished talking about your personality before going on to the topic of favorite subjects.

可以話比你知,而家九成中學都不再問這條問題,同佢地唔會比咁多時間你背書,大多數是快問快答,有時會考你IQ題,有時問下你時事題.....