求大神 Proofread ~

I have received your letter of 25 July requesting advice about the
1. reservation of Performance Hall in Art College. We are pleased
2. to answer any inquiries （queries 比較 general，而且有著「疑惑」和「讀者來信問編輯問題」的意思；相反 inquiries 比較 specific，指「查詢」）.

3. Concerning the reservation, payment has to be settled within 14 days
4. of your performance. Cheque is the most convenient way of
5. settling the payment. As mentioned in the previous mail, we
appreciate if you could pay 10 to 15% of the payment as
6. deposit before when the reservation is confirmed. For emergency
cases such as typhoon causing the cancellation, 50% of the
7. deposit paid would be refunded.

Please also pay attention to the following things. First, lighting
8. and preparation rooms are free to use. Projectors and the LCD
panels are available in the hall as well. Secondly, decoration
9. should not be started until 3 days before the reservation. Finally,
10. all decorations should be removed within 2 days of the ending
date of the reservation.


希望幫到你。

2013-07-08 18:53:12 補充：
其實是否規定每題一個錯處？因為這樣的話怪怪的。如果不是這樣規定，除以上的改正，以下的改正亦都需要：
第 1 題: reservation of ''the'' Performance Hall in Art College （漏 article）
第 3 題: ''the'' payment （漏 article）
第 5 題: appreciate ''it'' （不能只是 appreciate，你一定要 「appreciate 一樣東西」）
第 6 題: 不要 before（除了多餘，它也令意思變得不合理）

2013-07-08 19:26:24 補充：
第二題也可以是 enquiries （inquiries 的同義）。其實我也看了你另外一篇的 proofreading 問題，無估錯的話，兩篇都是同一出處，而那裏最後是用 enquiries 的，故跟一跟可能比較好。

I have received your letter dated 25 July requesting service pertaining to the reservation of Performance Hall in Art College. We will be pleased to answer any inquiries you might have. Regarding the reservation, payment has to be settled within 14 daysof your performance. Cheque is the most convenient way ofmaking the payment. As mentioned in the previous mail, we wouldappreciate if you could pay a deposit of 10 to 15% upon our confirmation.In cases you need to cancel the reservation due to emergencies, 50% of the deposit will be refunded. I would like to bring your attention to the following matters. Firstly, lighting and preparation rooms are free to use. Projectors and the LCDpanels are available in the hall as well. Secondly, decorationshould not be prepared until 3 days prior to the reservation. Finally,all of the decorations must be removed no later than 2 days after the performance had been ended.

I have received your letter on 25 July, you request advice about the reservation of
Performance Hall in Art College. We are please to answer any esquire. Concerning the reservation, pay has to be settled within 14 days of your performance. Cheque is the most convenient way of settling the payment. As I mention in the previous mail, we will be appreciate if you could pay 10 to 15% of the payment as deposit
before when the reservation is confirm. For emergency cases such as typhoon
causing the cancellation, 50% of the deposit paid would refunded.Please also pay attention to the following things.

First, lighting and preparation rooms is free to use. Projectors and the LCD panels are available in the hall as well.

Secondly, decoration should not be start until 3 days before the reservation.
Finally, all decorations should be remove within 2 days of the ending date of the
reservation.