Feedin' Time 4 P:M C/C?

2013-06-29 11:14 pm
They drop from the trees
like snipers shot -
just seconds ago camouflaged
by leaf and shadow.
They wait,
They watch,
till I come with sustinence.
The battle begins!
Blue Jays first
Squirrels second.
Blue Jay pilots zero in,
peck at squirrels' heads
and fly off with stolen booty.
Cardinals come in crimson
their dull brown wives eat first.
Titmice mind their own business
and just peck around the outskirts.
Those doves,of course ,
keep their distance
biding their time
sauntering around unfettered
until the melee is over.
One crow squawks,and the rest
of the murder follows
to dip the bread bits in birdbath soup
their favored entrée.
A red tailed hawk hovers above,
the Red Baron of the skies
and all disappear again.

回答 (6)

2013-06-30 1:27 am
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Gemini, This is a very good poem. You've been spending a lot of time looking out the window at natures neighborhood.Really great observation and description. You're going to think I'm a buzzard for bringing this up-- shhhhhhh, but I observed a typo on (hint)-- line 7. My favorite line is "to dip the bread bits in birdbath soup"(One time I think I woke up from a night out on the town with my head in one of those), but I digress. Keep Writing--------william
2013-06-30 8:56 am
I wish my blue jays would go away. They make it impossible for the smaller birds---the ones I WISH to feed. I'm lucky that I rarely see a crow by my feeder. I think they hang out in nearby cornfields.
You must live in the Northeast, eh?
Good poem.
2013-06-30 9:07 pm
You certainly are a pretty fair watcher of birds and their feeding habits. And your hawk is right on time...something learned over days, or weeks? Is the hawk zoning in because he is that hungry, or stoops to conquer a waiting, on him, dinner? Easy and quick?
2013-06-30 5:27 pm
You bring me birds, hundreds of them, different species at feeding time. A frenzy of activity and sounds. You painted a very vivid picture with your words. Great job done here.
2013-06-30 11:53 am
I would love to say something about your poem, but apparently if I sneeze it is a remark about Caz.

So I will enjoy your poem and dismiss my fellow paranoids.
參考: Yes I am not just president of the Paranoid Club for Men I am also a client.
2013-06-30 6:36 am
So visual I was right there with you! Nicely done.

One of my cats pokes my arm with her paw like "Hey, you!" One cat waits patiently and Pupper sits and stares at me. She also sits and stares when it's potty time so I have to guess. I hate it when I get it wrong.


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