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Scene 2. : Queen’s House Ho: Lighting to be suggestful in a dark night day
Wolf (enters): Tonight is a chance to run away, it must be successful so I should get away this place and revert to freedom! I wonder if Queen had slept on the bed.
Wolf is coming to queen bedroom and opens her door.
Queen is lying down on the bed and discovers the wolf opens her door.
Queen (enters): The Stupid wolf is trying to do stupid thing.I should handle him seriously and give him a penalty!
Wolf: I guess queen is sleeping now.It is right to escape.
(Wolf is closing the door quietly and then turns to his bedroom to take away his luggage.)
Wolf: I can do this, I can do this... .Freedom is coming to me.I shouldn’t be afraid! Just open the main door.Then I can get my freedom!
When Wolf is opening the main door,suddenly the Queen appears.
Wolf: Oh my god! The door has locked.Oh no.Where is the key?
Queen: What are you doing here? Run away? You are so brave.You should desire some awards, isn’t you?
The wolf is jumping up at the sudden sound.
Wolf: (Crying) Please forgive me, my master. I will always loyal with you and I promise that don’t do the same situation in next time, please...... .Forgive me.
Queen: This is not one time, wolf. I will punish you that you have to stand away from home and can't sleep tonight. I will let you suffer what is the” really pain”.
Then, Queen used the magic to let the wolf feel pain and chain. Wolf is under the tree and stays at cold night. He wants to return in the Queen’s House.
Wolf: Oh, I feel painfully sad and hopeless. Outside is too cold. I can’t move and really afraid. I cannot image what will happen tomorrow. Will anyone save me here?
After one hour, Red Riding’s Grandma is running near the queen’s house. She discovered wolf is crying and being fettered.