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Living in the city vs Living in the country
Living in the city is much more comfortable for me. There are more activities to do in cities, and also it is much more easier to earn money in country than in city!
In the country, we have more activities to do. There will be many shopping malls, Wi-Fi and libraries. It won't be boring to live in the city.
Everyone wants to earn money. In the city, you can earn more money because there are more big companies with high salaries and their is a big group of choices for you to choose. On the other hand, living in the country is don't have this many job choices. Everyone will rather be a Apple staff than a farmer.
Many people says that living in the city, there is a serious problem, the air pollutions. People are saying that living in countries the airs is much more fresh. However, it is not what you think. The government ave already established many green areas that will cause the air improve.
Finally, I think that living in the city will be much more better than living in country. There are activities to play and jobs to choose, so I think that living in the city is better than living in the country.

Living in the country vs living in the city

I feel that living in the city is better. There are so many reasons to explain why
it is better.
First, we will be able to enjoy more activities when we live in the city .In the
country, there is no shopping mall, Wi-Fi and library. In the city we can
have more activities and we will be very fun.
Second, it is easy to earn money living in the city. In the city, there are many big
companies for us to choose, so you can earn more money. But living in
the country is very hard to earn money because there are less available jobs. I think no
person wants to be a farmer more than to be an Apple staff.
Many people say that living in the city, the air pollution is very serious. They say living in the country, the air is fresher. But the government can establish many green areas in the most air pollution area so that the air quality will be improved.
I think living in a city is better because it has more activities and easy to earn money. This is true, so you should believe it! 評語:activities to do / do a farmer是以中文字/語法寫成出英文字，要誡掉和學正確以英語表達這種講法。留意我用了動詞(enjoy)來主導所講的意思。大致上只能修改句子的一些文法結構，文理(邏輯)和解釋理由等則要重組才能寫得好。例如many big companies choices = earn more money, farmer vs. Apple staff等等的邏輯不太合理。想像所有人都是城市消費者…你的食物是從何而來？再想深入一點你所謂的earn money是從何而來的。多看書和報紙英文評論和說理的邏輯和資料來參考如何寫出一個主題的要點。例如這題目的要點是否在於賺錢或活動？

Living in the country vs living in the city
I feel that living in the city is better. There are many reasons to explain why
it is better.
Firstly, we will have more activities if living in the city. We can enjoy our leisure time in the shopping mall, Wi-Fi and library which will be more fun.
have more activities and we will be very fun.
Secondly, living in the city is easier to earn money. The city has more big
companies which provide us with more opportunities. I personally think that nobody wants to be a farmer than being a staff in the Apple Company.
Many people said that the air pollution in the city is very serious, yet the air is much fresher in the country. However, the Government had established a myriad of green areas in the polluted area to ameliorate the environment. Based on the aforementioned reasons, I think living in the city is a better choice.