Correct my English Grammar?

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2013-02-21 2:24 am

Hi, I am an English Learner. I have tried to write some English sentences. Please help me to correct it. Also, please let me know if it can be written in a better way. Thank you!

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Finally, I got drive license two weeks ago, which means no more supervising driver, no more learner plate displayed on my car and no more driving lessons. Most importantly, I can drive whenever I want, independently.

I have never thought about driving in Australia since it looks too dangerous for me. The possible consequences scare me, what if I (crashed/crash) with others vehicle or what if I (run/ran) over somebody or what if my car (brake/broke/broken) down in a highway or…

But things change and I changed too. I have fallen in love with self-driving after my last travel. With our Toyota Camry, my friend and I travelled more than 8000KM and left our footprints in Western Australia, North Territory, South Australia, Victoria and New South Wales. Travel by your vehicle means you can stop whenever you want.
We stopped when there are famous attractions, gorgeous sceneries, unknown animals, interesting people or simply because we want to take a rest.
Without travelling with a tour guide, I (know/knew) we may miss some famous attractions or restaurants. However, in reward, we experienced something new. For example, we saw heaps of wildlife running beside us, most of them you could only see in zoo. We had nearly running out of petrol in the middle of nowhere. We had not (take/taken) a shower for a few days.

I just love this kind of travel experience, so I decided to get my own license.
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回答 (1)

dogtags40

2013-02-22 6:00 pm

✔ 最佳答案

This is a very well-written piece. I enjoyed it. My comments;

The second paragraph is written in present and present perfect. However, you state in your first paragraph that you now HAVE your driver's(US)/driving license so the second paragraph should be entirely in the past.:

I HAD never thought about driving...since it LOOKED too dangerous. The consequences SCARED me: what if I crashed, ran over someone, my care broke down (past tense of BREAK). [first sentence here is past perfect, an event in the past that happened BEFORE another event in the past (you got your license).]

We stopped (past) when there WERE (past) attractions, or because we WANTED (past) to take a rest.

Without a guide, we KNEW (past) we MIGHT (past) miss some attractions.

We nearly RAN out of petrol. We didn't take a shower for several days....Past perfect is used with the simple past to indicate an event that happened BEFORE another event in the past. Past pefect would work in this sentence if you add another event in the past that happened afterward:
"By the time we returned home, we had nearly run out of petrol and hadn't taken a shower in several (a few) days."

Thanks for sharing that experience with us.

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