can u give some comment to me

2013-02-01 2:06 am
Why pop star is so important that they can go into the bunker when there is end of the world?
Happiness is a very powerful medicine that produces a longer life to us. It reduces the stressful that we face everyday.
In other words, if a person still not happy all the time. He will just kill himself .Then, it will affect his mental health. So, it becomes so meaningless. When they go out of the bunker, they don’t know what will happen next, for e.g. parent’s death, etc.
There are three types of pop stars. Firstly, we want to explain the misconception of people why they think pop star is a negative imagine .It is not true ,is just some of them but not all .If you read newspaper, you usually find that they always join the money donation to help those poor people. It is very meaningful and can give out a positive thinking, too. For action movie star, they can use their own skill to protect us. While the incident is coming out, they can use their strong arm to protect us because they have training before acting the movie. On the other hand, for movie star, their types usually around friendship, be more positive to face the problem .They still can act without recorder, it can also a good way.
Inside the bunker, if the programmer goes in with his tools. They just write the program but do they so something positive to encourage people? No ,we can’t just rely on it ,also, if the program that is produced by programmer and bring side effect, will they become happy again?
For army office, we don’t support with this is because it is so straight forward. They don’t have their logical thinking that they must give respect to country .But they should think deeper, if a country is a dictatorship, will you still go to that .If you do, and will they attack back to you again? We think that their life is so bored .They just have training but no value the

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2013-02-01 11:50 pm
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Why pop star is so important that they can go into the bunker when there is end of the world?
假設這是作文的題目…因為本身都不太正確Why do pop stars be important that they should go into the bunker if it is going to be the end of the world? Happiness…, etc.這段跟主題完全無關,亦不是introduction. 合適的introduction是介紹應該以甚麼準則選一些人進bunker而不是談快樂人在所有人死哂後他仍會快樂地活下去而應該進入bunker.
There are three types of pop stars. …我找不到三種pop stars: 是否一種是做慈善的,一種是功夫明星,一種是電腦程式員?需要清楚分別整理一下,並要為每種提出到題的論點。There are three types of pop stars that I think should go into the bunker so that they may survive after the end of the world. The first type is pop star who donate money to charity, help the poor, do volunteer work or travel to China or Africa village to teach children. They care about people and they may care and encourage everyone that survives. The second type is kung fu stars or action movie stars. They are strong and trained in fighting or defense so that they may protect the people; in addition, they usually have a lot of friends and think positively when facing a problem.[小朋友…現實情形是明星拍戲可能被很多人和同事圍住,但不等於有真友情,假如他們要有友情才能正面處理問題,那麼不單是明星要進入bunker,他們的朋友和製作工作人員也要吧,否則如你所講他們沒戲拍還有甚麼動力生存並幫助保衛不認識的你呢] The third type is computer and software programmers. 等一下,前設的討論是為何pop stars明星被選進bunker,這個programmer是從那裏來的?你自己處理這部份啦。 The army that run the bunker may not support this idea because they only think about choosing people who respect the country may go into the bunker. But if you think deeper, inside the bunker, there should have no “country” any more. After surviving the end of the world, should we rebuild the many countries or just relive as one world. If surviving in a dictatorship, people may not survive in the bunker because they will kill each other eventually. 這段有點創意,但跟主題亦全無關係。你要寫出[你假設]在軍事管理下/獨栽管理下pop stars為何會改變bunker裏的制度或生存後的社會管理?
2013-02-01 2:12 pm
全篇文每一句都有大小不同的錯漏﹐加上跳躍性思維般的行文﹐我投降了。此文只應天上有﹐人間那得幾回見? 無謂改了。一係就咁交上去﹐一係從新寫過啦。


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