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Do you know which actor holds the title "Big Brother" in Hong Kong? I'll give you a hint. This man's nose is very large. You guessed it, it's Jackie Chan!
Jackie Chan was born in Hong Kong on April 7th, 1954. His diligence in the practice of Chinese Kung Fu allowed him to become a Super Star of the Kung Fu Movie industry. He is a well-known actor who now holds more than fifty films to his name. The action movies he starred in are famous across the globe. Jackie is not only passionate about his career. He is also a warm-hearted man who devotes his efforts into helping people in need. My father admires Jackie as his idol and frequently watches Jackie's films My father would often say to me with pride that his "nose looks very similar to Jackie Chan's nose." To be honest, I have to agree with him, like Jackie's nose, my father's nose is quite large as well.

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2013-01-17 16:42:04 補充：
sorry it's April 7, 1954 not April 7th

and also a "'." after Jackie's films .... 4th line from the bottom

Jackie Chan was born in Hong Kong on 7th April,1954.[誰教你寫日子是month day, year如果是美式不用用st/nd/rd/th的-April 7, 1954，英式就跟day month, year] He is a Super Star in the Kung Fu Movie industry, he is hardworking to practise his Chinese Kung Fu .He has more than fifty films by his name now, he is a well famous [原句well是健康 and famous是出名，well famous是好出名，或用widely famous廣負盛名] actor, with his action movies are popular all over the word. He loves his job very much, and now he also pays effort to help the people that are in need. He is a warm-hearted and kind man. He is my father’s idol, my father always watches his film in his free time. "My nose is very much like [] Jackie Chan’s." my father always says.[不用特別強調告訴你] Really , my father 's nose is as big as Jackie Chan’s.

Who is actor big brother in Hong Kong? give you a tips ,this man's nose is very big .OK , the answer is jackie chan.
Jackie Chan was born in Hong Kong on April 7th,1954. He is a Super Star of the Kung Fu action film in the movie Industry, as he is hardworking to practise the Chinese Kung Fu .He has had more than fifty films to his name so far,and being regarded as a famous Kung Fu actor, and his action movies are popular all over the word. He loves his job very much,and his effort is to help the underprivileged. Also he is a warm-hearted man and my father's idol, while my father often watches his film at leisure time."My nose looks as the Jackie Chan's." My father often speaks to me. In fact, my father 's nose is exactly the same or as big as Jackie Chan's.


2013-01-17 11:09:02 補充：
Amendment: ....,and his action movies are popular all over the world.

2013-01-17 11:11:21 補充：
Amendment:...,and his action movies are popular all over the world.

Jackie Chan was born in Hong Kong on April 7th, 1954. He is a Super Star of the Kung Fu Movie industry, he hardworking to practice his Chinese Kung Fu .He has more than fifty films to his name now, he is a well and famous actor, his action movies are popular all over the word. He loves his job very much, and he effort help the people are in need now. he is a warm-hearted and kind man. He is my father idol, my father always watch his film in free time."My nose is very like the Jackie Chan."My father always speaks with me. Really , my father 's nose very like the Jackie Chan is very big.