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我叫XXX，今年XXX歲，是一名小X學生，居住在XXX，就讀於XXXXXX。
我的學業成績中等，而數學方面表現較為突出，曾在奥林匹克數學比賽中獲二等獎。在課外活動方面，我是奥數小博士成員。我喜歡的科目有數學、中文、常識。我希望能在數學方面獲得更多獎項，盡展所長。我擅長的運動是遊泳。有空，我還會跟家人到泳池游泳，鍛鍊身體。
我的為人友善，時常幫助別人，喜歡結交朋友。我喜歡靜態活動，也喜歡動態活動。空閒時，我喜歡看書、到公園玩耍等。每逄星期日晚上，我都會和家人到公園跑步、玩耍。
我的志願是能考獲大學，將來成為社會的棟樑。我的理想職業是律師，希望幫助有需要的人。
My name is xxx.I am xxx years old.I am a Primary x student.I live in xxxx and I study in xxxxxxxl.
I am good at Mathematics.I have a good result in Hong Kong Mathematical Olympiad Competition. I also join a club which is about Mathematical Olympiad.I hope I can win more awards in Mathematics Competition.
I think I am friendly and helpful.I also like to meet new friends.In my spare time,I would like to reading or doing outdoor activities.On every Sunday,I like to go out with my family.
I hope I can admitted to the University .My dream job is lawyer. Because being a lawyer can help people.
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