Play Time
One day, gingerbread men go to the snow mountain. The sun is red, the sky is blue and the snow is white. They love skiing very much. They play it all day.
After skiing, they are all tired. They go home and take a good sleep. This night is so quiet.
Next day, they go to school. They like to play in the classroom. One gingerbread man says “John, come to catch me!”
The other gingerbread man says “Run, run, run, as fast as I can!”
After school, they go to the park. A man, a dog and a cat run fast in the park. Gingerbread men like to run and sing in the park. They love to sing “Play, play, play, as much as we can!” Play all time a day.
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2013-01-03 10:41 pm
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2013-01-04 12:39 am
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Play TimeOne day, gingerbread men WENT to the snow mountain. The sun WAS red, the sky WAS blue and the snow WAS white. They love skiing very much. They SKIED all day. (please note.. you can use "skied" or "played".. depends if they actually 滑咗成日雪 or 玩咗成日. But there should not be "it" after "play".)
After skiing, they WERE all tired. They WENT home and HAD a good sleep. THE night is so quiet. (Please note.. 可以用 "that" 或 "the".. "THE night is so quiet" --> 晚上真平靜。"THAT night WAS so quiet" --> 那一晚真平靜。)
Next day, they WENT to school. They like to play in the classroom. One gingerbread man SAID "John, come catch me!" (please note.. “catch" 之前係無 "to")
The other gingerbread man said "Run, run, run, as fast as I can!"
After school, they WENT to the park. A man, a dog and a cat RAN fast in the park. Gingerbread men like to run and sing in the park. They love to sing "Play, play, play, as much as we can!" THEY PLAYED ALL DAY.
參考: Me, myself & I
2013-01-03 11:09 pm
Play Time
One day, gingerbread men went to the snow mountain. The sun was red, the sky was blue and the snow was white. They love skiing very much. They play it all day.It was excited.
After skiing, they are all tired. They went home and took a good sleep. That night was so quiet.
Next day, they went to school. They like to play in the classroom. One gingerbread man said “John, come to catch me!”
The other gingerbread man said “Run, run, run, as fast as I can!”
After school, they went to the park. A man, a dog and a cat ran fast in the park. Gingerbread men liked to run and sang in the park. They loved to sing “Play, play, play, as much as we can!” Play all time a day .It was the day that was so amazing and interesting.I like the playing time.
2013-01-03 15:10:21 補充：
It is much more better XD
One day, gingerbread men went to the snow mountain. The sun was red, the sky was blue and the snow was white. They love skiing very much. They play it all day.It was excited.
After skiing, they are all tired. They went home and took a good sleep. That night was so quiet.
Next day, they went to school. They like to play in the classroom. One gingerbread man said “John, come to catch me!”
The other gingerbread man said “Run, run, run, as fast as I can!”
After school, they went to the park. A man, a dog and a cat ran fast in the park. Gingerbread men liked to run and sang in the park. They loved to sing “Play, play, play, as much as we can!” Play all time a day .It was the day that was so amazing and interesting.I like the playing time.
2013-01-03 15:10:21 補充：
It is much more better XD
參考: myself
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