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There are many recreational facilities in Ocean Park,for example dolphins show,South Pole Spectactacular and North pole Encounter. I think the dolphins show is the most interesting because they are jumping out of the water beautifully and being very lovely too.The second one is the South Pole Spectacular, it is because the penguin is very cute while walking.The third one is the North Pole Encounter because polar bears are covered with spots and looked very funny.The dolphins show is open at 11:30am,2:00pm,3:30pm and 5:30pm while the South Pole Spectacular and North Pole Encounter are open all day long.The dolphins show is in Marine World. While the South Pole Spectacular and North Pole Encounter are in Pole Adventure. In that case, I can study more about animals in Ocean Park.

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they are jumping out of the water beautifully可以改為they are jumping out of the water,that time so beautifully.

The second one 可以改為 another one

The third one 可以改為 The next one

11:30am,2:00pm 依d 時間可以改為 11 o'clock ,2 o'clock half past 3 and half past 5.
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下一句係 The South Pole Spectacular,North Pole Encounter are(唔係用is) open all the time.

The dolphins show in the Marine World. 唔洗加is ,另外加返the

The South Pole Spectacular and North Pole Encounter in the Pole Adventure 唔洗加is,另外加返the

I can study about animals in South Pole and North Pole.
依句可以改為: Today I am learn many about animals in the Ocean Park. <---如果可以既話,我覺得咁寫會好d.

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