關於英文presentation 急!

http://news.yahoo.com/apple-rolls-ipad-mini-sydney-shorter-lines-003507221--sector.html

Good morning everyone, today, i would like to share a piece of news article to all of you. the piece of news was published on 2nd of NOV, it was mainly about the new iPad released recently-- the iPad mini. In the news, it was mentioned that many of the new yorkers were attracted by it.
I think that this kind of phoenomenon can be seen very often, as the technology develops, more and more electrical appliances were invented and people are fasinated in these electrical product. I think that it is good that the technology had developed, but we, human cannot depend on the electrical appliances so much. this is the end of my presentation, thank you.

2012-11-04 19:26:13 補充：
In presentations, we usually start with
greetings, in which you can say "Good morning/ afternoon everyone, today, i would like to introduce/ share/ express my opinion on....( your topic)"

2012-11-04 19:26:44 補充：
and we use the wordings like FIRSTLY,SECONDLY,NEXT,LAST etc, to show the frequency
and last, we use "this is the end of my presentation, thank you" to end the presentation