中文翻譯英文 (短句~關於門票)

Will you send tickets yet?
請問您寄出門票了嗎 ?
I still delays have not yet received, so have concerns about.
因為我至今仍遲遲還未收到，所以有此疑慮。
If you have been sent, please forgive my rudeness, because I really look forward to the. 如你已寄出，也請諒解我的無禮，因我實在太期待了。

建議一下
很期待收到票用anxious比較適合

"Offense"?

May I ask did you send out the tickets?Because I still have not received ... So there is this doubtIf you have sent, please forgive my rudeness ... I too look forward to the

生意買賣還要用拜託的喔?真虛委!

2012-11-03 00:20:46 補充：
This is the way to do it - no begging:

Dear Dude,
Please confirm that you have shipped the tickets I purchased on date Oct 1, 2012 to the Disney World for family of 120. Per our agreement, I expect them to arrive at Oct 20, which is 14 days in the past.

2012-11-03 00:22:57 補充：
If I still do not receive them by the end of this week, I will have to cancel my credit card payment to you.

Thanks,

Prisoner.

2012-11-03 01:56:57 補充：
So, KR,
1. is the giver merely a stranger over the Internet?
2. have you reached an agreement with him or not?

Sasa大師,您三行字文法都有問題. Just to share with you. No offense!!!

Dear XXXX
I would like checking the deliver status of ticket.
The ticket hasn't been arrived so far. No offense! Has it been sent out?
If it did, please excuse my impolite because I am so desperate for it.

這應不是正式商業書信,而只是確認門票寄送狀態. 所以我用較口語的方式且稍作了調整.
英譯中:
親愛的 某某
我想要確認門票寄送的狀態!
門票目前尚未送到喔! 無意冒犯,但請問是否已寄出了呢?
倘若已寄出,請原諒我的無理,因為我實在是太渴望了!!

Hope it helps


2012-11-03 00:16:58 補充：
Hi Jim知識長 誠請不吝指教!!^^

2012-11-09 13:58:07 補充：
修正我的回覆~感謝Jim知識長的指教
Dear XXX
I would like to check the deliver status of ticket.
The ticket hasn't arrived yet. No offense. Has it been sent out?
If it was, please excuse my impoliteness because I am so desperate for it.