謝大家幫忙proof read下面的sentence

1. When we walked past the theater, there were a lot of people waiting in a long line outside the box office.

2. Students who live on campus are close to their classrooms and the library.

3. A myth is a story expressing traditional beliefs.

4. If you need any information, see the librarian sitting at the central desk on the second floor.

5. My oldest sister, Anna, is 21 years old.6. Hiroko was born in Sapporo, that isa city in Japan. 7. Patrick, who is my oldest brother, He is married and has one child.

8. The person sitting next to me is someone I've never met him.9. My favorite place in the world is a small city is locating on the southern coast of Brazil.

1) When we walked past the theater, there were a lot of people forming a long queue outside the box office.
2) Students who live in the dormitory within campus are close to their classrooms and library.
3) A myth is a story, handed down from olden times, containing the early beliefs of a race(esp. explanations of natural events, such as the seasons).
4)If you inquire any information, please go to the 2nd floor talk to the librarian who is on the central desk.
5)My eldest sister,Anna is 21 years of age.
6) Hirko was born in Sapporo that is a city in Japan.
7) Patrick is my eldest brother with only one child.
8) The person who is sitting next to me is someone I 've never met before.
9) My favorite place in the world is a small city situated in the southern coast of Brazil.

2012-09-11 02:23:17 補充：
Amendment: 7) Patrick is my eldest brother being married with one child.

No offence to anyone.

My favorite place in the world is a small city which is located on the southern coast of Brazil.

9. My favorite place in the world is a small city located on the southern coast of Brazil.

e.g. The office is located in London.

2012-09-09 02:14:06 補充：
最後兩條:

When we walked past the theater, there were a lot of people WAITING in a long line outside the box office.

If you need any information, see the librarian SITTING at the central desk on the second floor.

When we walked past the theater, there were a lot of people waited in a long line outside the box office.

Students who live on campus are close to their classrooms and library.

A myth is a story which expresses traditional beliefs.

If you need any information, inform the librarian sits at the central desk on the second floor.

My oldest sister, Anna is 21 years old.

Hiroko was born in Sapporo, which is a city in Japan.

Patrick who is my oldest brother is married and has one child.

The person who sit next to me is someone I've never met before.

My favorite place in the world is a small city which located on the southern coast of Brazil.