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2012-09-03 10:16 pm
According to the Francis Bacon said ' Knowledge is power ' , it proves knowledge is important for us , if you have knowledge that mean you can definitely rewrite your life .
Studying is like sailing against on the current ; either keep forging ahead or fall down , so we should use our time wisely . Instead of the time that we use inaccurately , the outcome will be quite seriously .
The conclusion is we have 86400 second for each day , it seems plenty , but we don't have any gain certainly if we constantly keep pastime in oline game or other games in each day that unaware of homework or job with importante.
So time is fair , you can select to use the time regularly by yourself , don't wrapped up in entertainment whatever you are the child or adolescent .

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2012-09-04 4:05 am
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Grammar mistakes:
Francis Bacon said, ' Knowledge is power'. This proves knowledge is important for us. Knowledge can rewrite your life.
Studying is like sailing against the current. No matter you keep going ahead or fall down, we should use our time wisely .If we don't use our time accurately, problems will happen.
We have 86400 second every day. It seems we have plenty of time , but we gain nothing certainly if we constantly keep pastime in online games or other games every day and seldom care about our homework or job which is important.
So time is fair , you can select to use the time regularly by yourself , don't wrapped up in entertainment no matter you are the child or adolescent .
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2012-09-04 8:22 pm
---Good gracious,you will not be troubled with your grammar.Won't you give me some comment on grammar?No,not a bit,unless it would help you.Going on to the points in grammar,I found it with great difficulty to correct it for looking around for the terms.Try watch me lay down the rules softly;don't give too high hopes on me.
----Errors and Corrections:-
----The thinker Francis Bacon said,"Knowledge is power". This proves knowledge is important for us (which )can rewrite your life.---------pronoun used
----Studying is like sailing against the current. No matter you keep going ahead or fall down,(you) should use your time wisely--------------pronoun used.If you don't use your time bona fide(=authentically)-----vocabulary,
(serious) problem will happen.-----------------------adj and subjunctive
-----We've 86400=60x60x24 seconds every day(which) seems---pronoun
a lot of time.But we certainly gain nothing if we constantly keep pastime in online games or other games every day, and seldom care about our homework or job which is (the more) important.-------------comparative adjective
----So time is fair (if) you can select to use it (consistently)=vocab,a regular pattern.The Maxim:-Don't wrap up(yourself) in entertainment,------pronoun,
whether you're the child or the adolescent!


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