Why do you come to our school

Since i appreciate that the school not only emphasize academic results, but also encourages students to participate different kinds of extracurricular activities and sport activities. I think that this can discover students talent and help them to have comprehensive development.

Similarly, i study hard but still have a number of interests, such as: shooting photos, practicing Chinese martial arts, Putonghua reciting, swimming and playing basketball. They are all the interests i like the most. (我覺你唔應該講電腦遊戲, 破壞印象ga! )

Another essential reason that i would like to study in your school is because your school teaching concept background is based on Christianity. The school motto are came from the instruction of the Holy Bible. Since i am a Christian, i attend masses every Sundays with my mother.

The third reason that i would like to come to your school is because your school is an English- based school. For myself, i really take English seriously since my aspiration is being a doctor. Furthermore, i noticed that the work of doctor and the usage of English have an inseparable relationship, for example: names of medicine and records of patients. So therefore, i need to build up my English skills in the next 6 years in secondary.

These are all of my ideas and i truly thank you for giving this precious interview opportunity to me. Lastly, if i could become a member of your school, i would be honored and delighted.

2012-09-09 15:51:41 補充：
1st paragraph line 2: 應該係"participate in", not "participate"

3rd paragraph line 3: 刪去" Since i am" , 加 " As"

quite a number of grammatical mistakes are discovered
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