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Today, my nearby flat is on fire![my nearby flat是有點chinglish的寫法-由於你係作者the flat nearby必然是相對於你住的地點而near-by] Smoke from the flat is straight![請問你想寫：個單位「一直」冒煙，還是單位冒出「垂直的」煙[現時的意思]。
In the flat is only a dog and a baby. [這句文法錯了-the flat is – “is”作為動詞是表示the flat「是」如何的單位，我估你想講the flat有/住了…，應該用的動詞是the flat “only” has a dog and a baby.或There is only a dog and a baby in the flat.]The baby is sleeping in the cradle and the dog is very smart and lawyer[你有冇查清楚這個字lawyer是否你要表達的字=律師，並且lawyer不是形容詞啊！] so it bark for help but not anyone heard. [but not anyone heard當中anyone這字的意思是任何人-不是沒有人-這是初學這字的同學常誤解的，你這句應該寫成：but no one heard.才是沒有(no)人(one)聽到。]In the same time, [這phrase用錯preposition，應該是At the same time.]the fire is becomeing bigger and bigger so the dog put[雖然用錯動詞-含/咬是不能用put=放在上面這詞的，但仍算文法規格冇錯]baby in his mouth then escape from the scene.[用scene雖然並不太貼題-用於報導還可以-但這是講述故事或(小說)情景則要更清楚表達escape from甚麼…最好不要用咁虛/綜合的畫面。]
After 5 minutes, the firemen arrive. They put out the fire.這句都寫編得順暢。
Finally, The baby's parents(The dog's master) gives (用錯verb=跟上面一樣is的意思是那主體subject「是」如何，你想說那人做多謝的動作而不是那人本身是多謝。] thanks [give thanks是感謝的動詞組-可記住會常有用，thank本身亦是動詞，但要小心用 – 例如如果你這裏寫the parents thanks their dog就很怪了-不是文法錯而是意思上人係唔會多謝一隻狗的=thank作為動詞基本上用在人對人。]for the dog and the firemen praise the dog for its bravery. [the dog is very brave是形容詞的寫法「它很勇敢」, 但如果你寫為bravery名詞則寫法是「它的(its)勇敢」而不是「它是勇敢」。] 最後指出一點全篇都應該用過去時來寫所有的動詞，因為你是在記錄已經發生了的事。 所以上面沒有改正這項，如我把你的內容重寫會是：

2012-08-29 16:02:32 補充：
Today, the flat nearby my home caught on fire. Smoke kept coming out from the windows and doors of the flat. There was only a baby and a dog inside at the time. The baby was sleeping in a cradle. The dog was smart and sensed the danger and started barking, but no one heard to come to help.

2012-08-29 16:03:57 補充：
As the fire got bigger and bigger, the dog opened the door and hold the baby by his month to carry him out to the open down the staircase. After 5 minutes, firemen arrived and they put out the fire quickly. The parents of the baby were very thankful to the dog.

------Checking the English Grammar in the story;the tense of a verb used to show the time of the action or state expressed by the verb in the past-----
Today, my nearby flat(1) on fire Smoke from the flat(2) straight.
In the flat(3) only a dog and a baby. The baby was sleeping in the cradle and the dog was very smart and (4) so it was barking for help but(5) heard. At the same time,the fire was becoming bigger and bigger so the dog put the baby in his mouth and then escaped from the scene. After 5 minutes,the firemen arrived. They put out the fire.
Finally, the baby's parents (the dog's master) (6) dog and firemen praised its bravery.
-------Checking the English Grammar for s1 standard with not too many difficult words;only 6 being corrected faithfully:-
(1)was caught
(2)windows were
(3)there was
(4)loyal=dependable, dutiful
(5)no one
(6)expressed thanks for loyalty of the = dependability