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2012-08-20 8:29 pm
I would recommend the story to my friends because they were very reckles,so
they always make wrong decisions and easy to regreted of it.This story can teach them think twice before action as everything you do at the moment will
affect your future life.Real life isn't like a firm, we can;t replay and do the things
again.As such, I recommend this film to my friend and hope they can learn think twice before action from it

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2012-08-20 11:21 pm
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第一個詞I WOULD = 暗示假設性的「可能」,而不是肯定性的「將會」,假如你的意思是告訴讀者/看這報告的人,我是會咁做的話,最理想是用I will。第二because they were…是past tense=他們過去reckless(串錯字)亦同時是暗示他們現在不是了,但句子後面似乎你是想希望透過這電影的內容教訓他們改過,即是你認為他們今天仍是reckless吧,所以用simple tense會比past tense更make sense. 第三to verb是用原形動詞,所以to regret是不會有ed的,如上所說,你應該是在說他們當今的狀況,所以就算不是這用詞easy to xxx亦不應用past tense。另外real life isn’t like a film(串錯字)。綜會除了這些個別的大錯,句字的編排次序和說明也不錯,但是開始和結尾都用recommend和又再用learn to think twice等會覺得重覆和你沒有詞彙可用的缺點。注意As such是指向前句的說明,即是指講解現實人生不能重演/回捲再來,所以你建議你的朋友看這電影;如用as such這邏輯有點問題,不是因為人生不能重來而你介紹你的朋友看這電影,而是你希望你的朋友改變所以介紹這電影。 我重寫修正會如下: I will recommend this story to my friends because they are very reckless and make wrong decisions but regret about them afterwards. The story can teach them to think twice before taking any action as everything we decide to do at the moment may affect our life in the future. Real life isn’t like a film, we can’t replay and do it over again. For such reason, I hope they can learn to be more careful about their choices of action after viewing this film; as such they will have a happier and better life.
2012-08-20 10:18 pm
I would recommend the story to my friends because they were very reckless
they always make wrong decisions and easy to regretted of it. This story can teach them think twice before action as everything you do at the moment will
affect your future life. Real life isn't like a firm, we can’t replay and do the things
again. As such, I recommend this film to my friend and hope they can learn think twice before action from it
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