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The places for secondary school’ students to get into universities have long been insufficient.Over the past few years, countless students ,who have successfully meet the minimum requirement of entering university , still failed to enter universities. It have stirred up discontent among the parents as well as the students. They criticize the government for not enhancing the places of university to deal with the large demand. For me, I totally agree with the above argument because increasing the places of university can definitely reinforce the competitiveness of teenagers.

Nowadays, without an university’s degree, teenagers can hardly survive in such highly competitive city like Hong Kong. Neither do they have work experience nor an university degree, only low-skilled job are available for them. This kinds of job often require their employees working for long hours and just offer minimum wages to their staff. In Hong Kong, it seems that holding a degree is a must for seeking jobs. Therefore, the government should increase the number of places of university as soon as possible for the sake of the future of teenagers and Hong Kong.

However, the places of university should not be increased too much too. Let me take Taiwan as an example. Almost 100% Taiwan students can enroll at universities after completing secondary schools. It leads to the result that graduating from the universities with low ranking and reputation is meaningless and useless. Employers will only take account of those who graduate from prestigious universities. Therefore, it is not wise for Hong Kong to follow suit ,otherwise the value of degree will be devaluated.

Lastly, no matter how much are the places of universities, what local students should do is not to grumble but to put more effort to study. All of you are the pillar of society in the future, Hong Kong prosperity is all depend on your professional knowledge. So, just try your best to study and contribute to the community in the future.