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Nowadays, parents 1)tend to give pocket money to their beloved children which is far enough for them. There have been some criticism 2)towards those parents 3), saying that it is unnecessary and unreasonable to give such amount of money to the children. However, some parents defending themselves claim that the best should be given to the children in their childhood so as to make 4)them grow happily. Although both of the arguments are understandable, it seems to me that giving the best to children do not necessary means paying a large 5)amount of money to the children.

As I notice , many children are so ‘rich’ that they can purchase everything 6)they want, such 7)as famous 8)brand-name products as i-phone and Levi’s jeans. However, I am worrying about they would not know how to 9)manage their wealth in the future if this bad habit 10)continues. The cost of living in Hong Kong is 11)so high that numerous 12)grassroots find it unaffordable, so children should learn how to live frugally rather than living lavishly to avoid the situation of 13)imbalance of income and expenditure. 14)It is very common that some teenagers plunging into debt are largely due to the lavish living style. So how can we 15)deal with this problem? One effective and the most efficient way is to decrease 16)the amount of pocket money, and then children will know that their pocket money is not unlimited, they will use it more carefully and only buy things 17)they need. For a long term, they will gradually develop the skill of managing their own money.

Lastly, I agree with the views of giving the best to children, but giving money is definitely a bad way to make children happy. 18)It will only lead to the dependence of money. 19)Although they have the skill of managing wealth and proper living style, they can hardly survive in such city 20)like Hong Kong.