小學英文作文.今次我唔知點作.請各位哥哥姐姐教教我點作先好.

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審題嚴重錯誤
( " One is such a bad number" 係個topic?)
1 "One" is such a bad number, not "seven"
2) 就算 個topic係 "Seven" is such a bad number, 你呢篇野由始至終都冇寫seven 同你寫ge內容冇乜關係。而你寫ge內容/句子都唔係好make sense.

grammar (完全地ignore 你ge內容)
believer --> believe , luch-->lunch,希望你只係打錯字
1)I believe many people have their unlucky numbers. <--唔係future tense, 唔好以為中文ge"會xxx" = will. "Will" 有將來先做ge意思. common mistake

2)I works----> i work!! "you"/ "I" 雖然係單數, 但係絕對唔同he she it 一樣處理lor!! basic grammar

3)"Sometimes I went to lunch and there are a long line I have to
wait for on Sunday."? 想點?? 前半句用past tense, 後半句用present tense?
"There are a long line"? "a long line 係singular, 點會用"are"? ---> I have to wait in a long line. 自己查下字典, wait 點用, wait for 點用la, 睇例句

4)然後你成段野一時past tense一時present tense, 你應按時序組織下發生d咩事, 組織好先寫出黎, 並用正確ge tense.

5)"buy a ticket which is my favor movie": favor 係咩part of speech 詞性?! 查字典! 形容movie 用咩part of speech?! --> bought a ticket for my _______ movie

6)There are always some bad people asked me for money.--->
There are always some bad people asking me for money.

7) I look like so weak--> I look so weak

8) "unfortunately things"?, 你多手打多左-ly 定係你唔識分part of speech 定係你根本唔連學下睇字典都懶?

9) "So i always make me a reason to go out" ? 同前文自相予盾.

10) I want to get change--> I want to change.

11) I go to do exercise everyday--> ..... every day. Everyday(adj.形容詞), 中文ge "每一天, 我都會...." ge 每一天 係adverb, 查字典

小結:
思路混亂, 諗都乜就寫乜, 但係平日疏於思考, 諗ge野冇組織就hum ba laan 寫曬落去, 因此文句經常俾讀者唔make sense ge感覺, 你連自己都鬼踢後尾枕咁 反駁返自己lor (Sometimes i will stay at home because i don't want to have too much unfortunately things. But I often felt bored at home. So i always make me a reason to go out) 如果你自己覺得係make sense, 咁唔該你強調番sometimes stay home/always go out 如何可共存
===> 要組織 + 寫完用讀者角度睇自己寫ge野

要多看,多理解別人的觀點&睇法--看文章,看書看戲,看好的書評影評看,社論(中文ge 材料都可以) , 寫自己睇法, 同自己辯論

查字典+學睇字典, 唔好用google translate/ 任何translator

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