小學英文作文.可以幫幫我改改佢??希望今次會好D

麥乜小朋友： 這篇仍沒有好了多少，不過是讚你一句你的故事內容很豐富並且有主題和鋪排，唯獨組句和句子本身的文法仍基礎不足，或許先練習把一個意思(句子)試寫三至五種相同的表達但用不同的句式和詞彙，問老師或導師作修改，逼自己學對使用句法和詞彙的規範，免得寫出很多錯的用詞和句式也不自覺。 Always不適合用在這意思上Unuseful是錯字(沒有這個字)，WORD都會紅線告訴你錯字啦Skyness是寫錯字，應該係shyness.其他的唯有自己參考改句了。

2012-07-30 17:53:59 補充：
I bought many useless items when shopping and wasted a lot of money on that.
My parents scolded me many times to throw all those things away, but I didn't listen to them.

2012-07-30 17:54:47 補充：
Yesterday was Sunday. I went out for lunch, I ordered some salads [或a salad]
and seat-in to dine. Meanwhile, Kate called me to go shopping and I gladly went with her. We met in front of the cinema because I wanted to see a movie. After that she took me to a clothing store I have never been.

2012-07-30 17:55:51 補充：
There are many different special clothes I have ever seen. I would love to buy some new clothes for work but I ran out of all of my money for those useless things. So I borrowed some money from Kate with embarrassment/shamefulness. Finally I was happy to have bought my favorite clothes....

2012-07-30 17:56:10 補充：
I am [xxxxx] that I got a friend can helped me to resolve [thought out = 想通想透/計劃 –不是解決問題] some problem.

2012-07-30 17:56:24 補充：
[太多happy了-你要開始學多點形容你的感情/感覺的字，亦培養自己的感受-不是甚麼事都只是開心(開心是很自我中心的感覺)，你有一個肯幫你的朋友這感覺可以是感恩(thankful)，可以是感謝(appreciated)，可以是感動(being moved)，可以是慶幸(lucky)…]

Shopping

I always go shopping and I also buy things that are useless so I waste a lot of money.My parents always ask me to throw them all but I dont't listen to them.

Yesterday was Sunday. I ordered some salad for lunch. Suddenly, Kate asked me to go shopping and I felt excited. We met in front of the cinema and we wanted to watch a movie. After that, she took me to a cloth shop that I have never been before. There are many special clothes that I have never seen. I wanted to buy some new clothes but I have used my money for those useless things. I borrowed some money from Kate. Finally I felt happy that I could buy my favouite clothes and I went back home.

I am happy that I have a friend who can help me to solve my problems.

errors and corrections:-Shopping:-
I always go shopping and bought something useless home after that shopping-spree that wasted me a lot of money.My parents had scolded me to get rid of all those things which I didn't do.
Having ordered salad for lunch,Kate called me for a shopping-spree last Sunday. Having been met and seen the movie, she brought me to a clothing shop which I had never been before.
There were many different kinds of clothes that I had never seen before. I wished to buy various new garments for work,but I just ran out of money,being spent on those unnecessary things. So I tried to borrow Kate's money with a shy of saying so. Finally I was happy to buy my favourite clothes and went home.
I am happy that I've got a friend who was so thoughtful,considerate,and care for me.

2012-07-30 16:33:42 補充：
001 has got an illogical E/C translation?!

購物

總是去買東西，我也買一些東西上班時間非法使用到家裡我浪費了很多的錢。我的父母責駡我很多時候要把所有的東西。我沒有聽他們的意見。昨天是星期日。就去吃午飯，我訂購一些沙拉並採取一個座位。與此同時，凱特叫我購物和我快樂和她一起去。我們見過在電影院前，因為我想看看一部電影。之後，她帶我到一家服裝店我曾經去過。還有我有很多不同的特殊衣服見過。我想買幾件新衣服的工作，但跑出所有的我的錢為那些上班時間非法使用的東西。因此我借了從凱特與 skyness 一些錢。最後，我很高興能買我最喜歡的衣服，回家。我很高興我有一個朋友，可以幫我給出的思想幾個問題。