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2012-07-21 2:22 pm
Please help me to check if there is any grammatical mistake.
Also, how the sentence can be written in a better manner.

Thank you!

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The objective of pruning is to produce strong and healthy plants, which involves removing diseased or damaged wood, thinning the crown to increase the air flow and removing crossing brunches. It is a simple but boring and repetitive. Workers normally need one to two days to get familiar with the pruning techniques. They can prune a tree in less than five minutes once they get used with it.
They work five to six days a week and eight hours per day. The salary is based on the number of tree pruned, it means the faster you work, the more you get. As a result, everyone works as fast as they can, some workers even do not eat or drink in that eight hours.
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2012-07-21 6:02 pm
✔ 最佳答案
The objective of pruning is to produce strong and healthy plants, which involves removing diseased or damaged [wood] [I don't wood is the right word here, leaves and branches may be better] , thinning the crown to increase the air flow and removing crossing brunches. It is a simple task but boring and repetitive. Workers normally need one to two days to get familiar with the pruning techniques. They can prune a tree in less than five minutes once they get used to it.
Gardeners work five to six days a week and eight hours per day. The salary is based on the number of tree pruned, it means the faster you work, the more money you get. As a result, everyone works as fast as they can, some workers even do not eat or drink in that eight hours.

[Not eating for 8 hours is managable, but no drinking of water in a plantation/garden outdoor is suicide and employer may have broken a few laws, be careful and make sense of what you write! Suggest wiriting "some worker even do not eat in that eight hours and only bring water for drinking and cooling in the field/garden.]
2012-07-21 5:06 pm
**I am editing this without knowing anything about plant pruning, it is all based on my English knowledge. **

Pruning is an art that helps growing strong and healthy plants. It is simple and easy, but it could be boring and repetitive at the same time. One of the main job is removing diseased or damaged wood and crossing brunches. Also, crowns need to be thinned every once awhile. This is to increase the airflow within the plants so that it could breath in more air. It usually takes one to two days for workers to get themselves familiar with pruning techniques. Once they get used to it, they could trim a tree in less than five minutes.

Workers work eight hours a day and five to six days a week. Salary is based on the amount of trees they pruned. So, the faster they work, the more they get paid. As a result, workers are trying their very best to work as much as they could; some of them even do not eat or drink during the 8-hour work period.





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