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My weakness is being overcautious. Let's say, i have to make my bed every morning, or if a pen is taken out from the pencil cup, it has to go back in afterwards.

* When you are saying you make your bed and retreive the pen to the pen cup, it only shows that you are a well-organized person, doesn't necessarily mean that you are cautious. If you are giving examples about you double check the gas stove before you leave home or you read notices over and over again to make sure you will not miss an important note, those will be more appropriate to be called overcautious.


Make the bed = tidy the bed up and make it presentable.
Pencil cup or pencil holder are the same.

我的缺點係過分小心謹慎, 例如我每朝早起床一定要接被, 一枝筆拎左出泥後一定要插番入去筆筒:
My suggested translation:Myweakness is doing things too cautiously. For example, I make sure that my bedis tidied up every morning and that my pen is back in its holder after use.

My weakness is overcautious. For example, I must tidy up my bed when I wake up. Also, if I take out a pen from my pen holder, I must put it back to the original location.= your translation is acceptable

However, I will rewrite it as following

My weakness is overcautious. For example, I must tidy my bed when I get up every morning. Whenever I take a pen out of a pen holder, I must put it back afterwards.

Your translation is OK..
"overcaution" also can be replaced by "overcautious" ^^

2012-06-20 19:04:02 補充：
Also, "brush pot" and "pen case" can be put by "pen holder"

得,仲very good添!!
hope i can help you!!