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01 The canoeing adventureToby was the only candidate in my canoeing adventure; we started in South America Canal, and then turned into Boo-Boo River. [In the meantime只可用於形容現在發生的事-你在記敘過去發生的事。另這phrase連接上文跟下文的時間應該是同時發生的兩件事，這裏不是-前面是地理行程-後句是過程經歷，並不是同時的兩件事，如果你講As we rolled down the steam, in the mean time, a helicopter was flying downstream to get ready to transport us back home.咁就係同時的意思 ] By rowing down the stream, we could explore and experience cannibals and canyon [cannibal是指食人族的土人-不是collective的，先說你的explore和experience食人族的人意思很有問題=探索和經歷被食？另外cannibals是人+canyon是山/石，兩樣不可以/不應該and埋的寫法 =>建議你分兩句用不同的動詞/形容方式來寫]. [不需The – 沒有有一種叫civilized man的個體 – 這詞是一種concept] civilized men are hard [錯ever – 不需要] to be seen. [不要瞎抄了別的情景的phrase = hardly ever seen = 重來都未見過，hard to be seen/find = 沒見到/難以找到]That [你今天記述那天=that day，但由於你接著要用”day”所以這開頭詞便可省去day] was a perfect day for us to go sailing.[註：sailing是駕駛帆船-你上面說的是划船，並不是同一樣的活動] We brought along a lot of food, plenty of water and many candies for this journey. We also prepared some canvas to build a shelter in case of rain.[記敘時把rain變為noun一個現像而不是一個未知/有時間性的情況] We started the engine when everything was ready. However, our boat lost balance when everyone jumped into it [jumped into it雖然沒有錯，但航海有它專用的術語，登船會說got on board] at the same time. Our small boat capsized and we all fell into the river. It was freezing but luckily mother Suki [誰是mother suki?通常這樣寫Mother xxx是指xxx修女 – Mother是她的title稱號] packed us some warm clothes and towels in our backpacks. Not long after we all got dry and a group of cannibals captured us as hostages. Toby and I were certain that we were facing a great catastrophe.

sorry i dont really understand your meaning
could you mind to explain it briefly?

error and correction:-a hostage to fortune=means something that you have ,or have promised to do ,that could cause trouble or worry in the future.,hence to match with the initial (c),it is Chinese hostage to fortune.