英文作文(文法修改問題)

When I was a little boy, I wanted to be a teenager. I had fantastic memories.[這是你老師說的singular/prual的問題: “a”是單數，”meories”(串錯)是眾數] For example: My parents looked like giants [Parents是眾數(意思是父+母)，所以他們看似也是眾數的giant]. When I went to a basketball court for the first time, I saw the goal ring [籃框/圈唔係咪這個字呢?] and it was like a tall building, [用錯high字了-記住一樣東西本身是高大是tall, 一樣東西放在高處才是high, 當然港語的high都是借用英文感覺高漲=把情緒/情感/感覺帶到一個高處] [你應該在這句用明喻= a is like b, 後半的my house是重覆和錯的對比(事實是除非你住的house是一層樓高，否則籃球架不會跟你住的大廈那麼高的-就算是比喻也是錯的] It scared me!!! [It’s = It was…便要跟一個adj, 而scared是verb, 句法而言It was scared=它(籃球架)被嚇人] [另一個主題而想想連接詞或新一段]"Be careful when you are crossing the road." Mum said. That's made my brain exploded. I didn't like my mum at that moment, I tried to [錯用be = tried to be是想成為/嘗試做到 – 你似乎是你想不理她] ignore her. I wanted to be alone. In reflection, [用錯by the way=順便一提。你意思是你想告訴讀者你想清楚後的感受是], my mum was just protecting me.. Now, I’m 15 years old, I don't want to be a teenager, I'd like to be a baby. It is because I'm really busy for the whole year.[這句跟後面的的內容和前面的理由不相干啊-不可以放這裏] I'm 180cm [注意不是你have(有)幾高，而是你是幾高-英文用數字高度便不用再講「高」(要學不要把中文字句變成英文句子)], I won't be scared by the goal ring anymore. and I’m strong now. [everything i do,iam really careful.這句完全離題和跟你想做嬰兒而不想做有甚麼關係-事實其他句子也沒有解釋你為何不想做年青人而想返回做嬰兒] I don't want to work all the time, it's sick of me[sick of me是甚麼意思=它(work)是我不妥?錯得冇得改正]. but I'm not going to give up. Because my parents spent tons of money on me, that's the reason I can't give up. I haven't seen my parents in ages, I am missing them right now. [如前述parents是父+母，後面只講mum話要重設角色] I don’t think my mum is annoying anymore.[won’t不是錯-只是意思上won’t是未來將來時態，如果是現在已經改變應該用現在時態] [註：是按你的編排指出修改，沒有改寫你的內容，但後半部的編排雜亂和不對題，試集中一點(你是想講你不想做teenager的理由，還是想講你很想努力做好teenager以報親恩)。